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Multiplicity the Hallucination (Free verse) by vulcan
Am I not he who In a moment of glee Believed himself to be The bee from over the Lord's soft bower fled? Am I not the one who thought he's the Devil and ate a crocodile That had served for his daddy's dish An old lace-enamoured bitch, while The Flowers talked of the bygone days? Am I not the he who in a glance Was put into a bottle and sent Over the seas Only to be a leaf To a man Thinking under the trees? From all these I conclude that I A crocodile-engraven bottle in a bed of flowers Feed Where the bees talk with the thinking man On the Leaf's journeys Overseas In a glance.

Up the ladder: Fueled hearts
Down the ladder: Lost and found

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Arithmetic Mean: 6.714286
Weighted score: 5.4610424
Overall Rank: 2858
Posted: January 4, 2003 11:42 PM PST; Last modified: January 4, 2003 11:42 PM PST
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Comments:
[9] horus8 @ 24.126.113.154 | 5-Jan-03/12:07 AM | Reply
this is good, but are you fuckin getting lippy? have a 9 for both lips.
[8] suzanna @ 66.183.132.32 | 5-Jan-03/2:49 AM | Reply
quite good. good title. that's all i can say.
[9] INTRANSIT @ 64.12.96.46 | 5-Jan-03/7:41 AM | Reply
And we're puttin it on wax!! It's the new syle!!! 4and 3and 2 and 1......
[n/a] <~> @ 67.84.171.238 > INTRANSIT | 5-Jan-03/10:11 AM | Reply
i think you're kickin' it live.
[9] Quarton @ 12.217.212.111 | 9-Jan-03/11:17 AM | Reply
Hi, vulcan

Been meaning to read more of your "stuff" and I hope it is all as good as this one. Loved the way you tied it all together in the last stanza. It made me think which I like a poem to do. Very impressive with great imagery and meaning. I give it a nine though I think a ten is not out of line. Oh...just what does a crocodile taste like? I do know they are edible and I'm sure the croc views us the same way:)
[6] oneglove @ 24.171.9.144 | 27-Oct-05/12:14 AM | Reply
huh?
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