on Jellybean Land by JoyLuck
15 Jun 2003, 11:34 PM
are you 11 years old or some sort of super genius writing to fuck with the minds of the inferior?
on Janine (a set of haikus) by capachijim
15 Jun 2003, 11:43 PM
put away the thesaurus
on The Drunkest ever by horus8
9 Jun 2003, 10:04 PM
but ?UNFORTUNATLEY? I can't remember
who in the hell you are anyway.
it sounds as though its more fortunate than not.
Otherwise I love this poem. VERY real. Great work.
who in the hell you are anyway.
it sounds as though its more fortunate than not.
Otherwise I love this poem. VERY real. Great work.
on Life's Loves Lost by Jigg
23 May 2003, 3:35 PM
The language is in need of some maturing, but the ending is good. Still needs work, but moving along.
on great caesar's ghost by bondjedi
20 May 2003, 9:32 PM
That is terrible, but then again...6
on One Moment to the Other (v2) by nentwined
20 May 2003, 9:33 PM
heading towards something great
on Over beast by Crakyamuni
20 May 2003, 9:34 PM
very young sounding
on i will not come to bangladesh by lost in america
20 May 2003, 9:37 PM
beautifully written
on some deleted poem
20 May 2003, 9:42 PM
This is fantastic bit of poetry, but the zypher and eden seem thrown in haphazardly. i would nix them or add more references before them. still 9
on Bitter Breakfast by nugit15
19 May 2003, 5:43 AM
when there "were" words?
on some deleted poem
26 May 2003, 12:46 AM
you suck
on some deleted poem
15 Jun 2003, 11:31 PM
A little to wanna be artsy for me. Yet...
on Over Simplification by Richard
31 Mar 2004, 2:26 PM
I agree. It needs more work, but good start
on A wicked rose grows in God's grapevine. by SupremeDreamer
31 Mar 2004, 2:30 PM
Some of your references seem a little to cliche. The wind always whispers and caresses. Everyone's spirit has a beast. Try some different language. Especially the first line. It was a bit of a turn off. The end was much better.
on matador by ThePariahDog
31 Mar 2004, 2:32 PM
too wordy for my tastes.
on The Hell With Growing Up by wilco
31 Mar 2004, 2:42 PM
how old are you that you have wasted away to such a tremendous degree?
on If God Was a Nihilist by baughworm
19 Feb 2005, 10:24 AM
nihilist: someone who rejects all theories of morality or religious belief