Re: a comment on Crush Rejected by thepinkbunnyofdoom	4-May-03/7:52 PM
I would change them but its all a reference to a conversation I had with a girl whom rejected me. But thanks for the advice.
Re: We be free by blurryphotograph	3-May-03/9:47 PM
You be motivated, I give you that Plus I give you this too -8- From the blind deaf and mute
Re: kruder&dorfmeister by rockinindividual	3-May-03/1:48 PM
I felt like this didn't hold my attention too well. Its not bad but it is lacking in some aspect that I feel could be there but isn't(I have no clue what it is either and thats driving me nuts). Its held back when it needs to read more smooth and sexy like a coffee house music. -5-
Re: a comment on Dumb Ideas by thepinkbunnyofdoom	29-Apr-03/12:28 PM
Thanx I was just being commenting about how we(men) end up trying to prove our feelings but in the end its never enough. I'm sure I'll rewrite it soon but right now I like the playful mockery this makes of my inner emo kid. If possible could you try and point out the awkward points so that I can give some thought to how to rewrite them?
Re: Regrets by Mikius	28-Apr-03/6:51 PM
Hmmm... My final say??? you meaning 'saying' or 'your last words', 'dying breath' maybe? Just checking. Not bad anyway. -6-
Re: he was the one i had written about before i met him by rockinindividual	28-Apr-03/6:47 PM
If I was girl I'd kiss him goodnight but since I'm not I'd say "see ya later" -8-
Re: To Be by Gothicnightmare	28-Apr-03/6:39 PM
Oi Blah Vay! You didn't. You just didn't! For Chirst Sake you Didn't okay!! You are not a mass serial killer nor will you ever be(because you post poems like this on the internet and people start watching you like a hawk) so no!. I can't call this trash because it at least has some good imagery(just a little) but Geeze Louise there is no real strength as a lyric and it reads like a bad metallica song(no offense to said band) from after load. I try and be nice, really I do, and I hope you don't take offense but this is not a winner in my books. -1-
Re: The band "Sigh" aced their MENSA tests by Jeremi B. Handrinos	28-Apr-03/6:27 PM
See what happens when you obey your parents? -10-
Re: waking up to fucking reality by d35	28-Apr-03/6:20 PM
Cruel Fate. Oh well, anyway I like the way that it was detached and could have several different meanings. -10-
Re: beat myself with a stick by sir_heff	22-Apr-03/7:51 PM
Funny but, it seems to ryhme too much(if thats possible) -7-
Re: god damn P.D.A. by sir_heff	22-Apr-03/7:49 PM
Yeah I know Exactly how you feel. -10-
Re: glazed point of view by sir_heff	22-Apr-03/7:46 PM
spoken like somebody whose been tokin, but do why can't you pass that shit? Cause the bunny wants a hit! -9-
Re: a comment on My Blues by thepinkbunnyofdoom	21-Apr-03/7:11 PM
Umm... Well for starters thanks for the advice. I'm not female tho and This was just free versing ryhme with no focus. I'm glad you think I have potential!! :)
Re: Overdose by Miggy	21-Apr-03/10:26 AM
Whom ever sings this song must be taking it slow or have some really good diction to thier voice. For a song about being hungover I found it to be a little wordy to tell the truth. I really suggest going over it again and maybe doing a 2nd draft. -7-
Re: a comment on Descent into Madness by thepinkbunnyofdoom	21-Apr-03/10:13 AM
Its okay I was just having a bad day. I see what you mean there are alot of stuff here that doesn't fit the mold(to put it nicely). Its the when is a photo more than a photo question. Sorry for snapping, I shouldn't have and I apologise. o
Re: a comment on Descent into Madness by thepinkbunnyofdoom	21-Apr-03/10:06 AM
K :)
Re: Sweet Dreams by d35	18-Apr-03/1:03 PM
This tale of suicide could use a little work. Connect the events. -7-
Re: Toute ma Vie by talking_goldfish	18-Apr-03/12:52 PM
Je ne parle pas francais.
Re: NUDIST FLEET by talking_goldfish	18-Apr-03/12:50 PM
Huh?
Re: Rainbow Tears by talking_goldfish	18-Apr-03/12:49 PM
K big guy, but the try in "Try Drop Your pain forever more, Night Falls To lose you in yourself," Is that supposed to tears? -4-