| Re: a comment on Attention, This Just In by thepinkbunnyofdoom |
23-Sep-06/9:01 PM |
The defintion of an iliterate is someone
1 : having little or no education; especially : unable to read or write
Obviously I can read and write
2 a : showing or marked by a lack of familiarity with language and literature <an illiterate magazine> b : violating approved patterns of speaking or writing
My vocabulary is fine. Considering that this is poetry, approved patterns don't really mean fuck.
3 : showing or marked by a lack of acquaintance with the fundamentals of a particular field of knowledge <musically illiterate>
You might have me on three, if you include the larger body of everything I've ever written. However, whether or not I'm an illiterate or not doesn't change one fact.
You are a Bitch. So please, do the world a favor, and go choke yourself on a big black sweaty aids infested penis.
Your also stupid. A rational person would think, "oh god no, he wrote another one" and merely skipped over my submission, if they truly hated what I wrote so badly. You apparently lack the brains to do this.
Making you a Stupid Bitch.
Have a nice day Edna
I look forward to hearing from you
<3 Jason
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| Re: a comment on Guilt Trip by thepinkbunnyofdoom |
12-Aug-06/9:49 AM |
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That explains every thing, save for the meaning of life.
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| Re: a comment on Guilt Trip by thepinkbunnyofdoom |
12-Aug-06/9:15 AM |
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| Re: a comment on Guilt Trip by thepinkbunnyofdoom |
12-Aug-06/9:15 AM |
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Really? You don't say? I'm surprised you feel that way considering that all of my live audiences have loved it and clapped, every time I'm ever sung it.
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| Re: a comment on James The Dashing Pirate(Rewrite) by Luzr |
8-Apr-06/1:55 PM |
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Or I could be patient, let others read it, hear some good advice, and not behave like a child when the "Mature" Adults say something I don't like. Arguing online is like being in the special olympics, even if you win, your still a retard.
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| Re: a comment on Generation Next, Fuck you(The Fake Out) by thepinkbunnyofdoom |
31-Jan-06/9:51 PM |
It is everything that was in my head at one moment, at one time. Flames of thought, burning bright, junping torch to torch in death, lighting dark recesses, buried beneath a coat of dust, being swept away, to be poured down the drain, as you question, these strange breath's that I call an answer, are merely images captured by a floating attention span, traslated to text in my passing with a computer screen.
<3 Jason
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| Re: a comment on Generation Next, Fuck you(The Fake Out) by thepinkbunnyofdoom |
30-Jan-06/2:15 PM |
You hit it on the head(No pun intended). As for the month for blowjob poems, thats more next month.
;-)
<3 Jason
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| Re: a comment on Snake in the Grass by thepinkbunnyofdoom |
8-Dec-05/3:16 PM |
Ripping off 80s lyrics? The only music from the 80s I have listened to is a few punk rock bands, and even then I haven't listened to them since I was 19. During the 80s when I was a small child my parents only listened to country and the beatles, so... I don't think I could possibly know I was ripping off 80s lyrics.
As for the rest of that, fuck you too. I was having a bad day when I read your last comment and I'm have a worse one today. As for writing the same crap, I'm fucking 21. Lot of life experiance that gives me huh? Same mistakes, how ever will I know that they are mistakes unless someone points them out to me(Besides the dryer doesn't even fucking start until you close the door, and we both know my head is way to big to let the dryer close)?
Sorry I snapped, but oh well, goto hell, and the whatever else
Later Daze
<3 Jason
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| Re: a comment on Snake in the Grass by thepinkbunnyofdoom |
6-Dec-05/1:40 PM |
The smart ass answer
1. Mental instability, perhaps a long standing grude, and opportunity.
The Stab in the Dark Answer
2. The man was her sister
A further Stab in the Dark Answer
3. The man was her sister and she fucked him before being told his true identity
A far fetched idea
4. It's really complicated and involves being ones own grandmother type shit. I'm sure you don't want to even hear that one.
And my honest answer
5. I have no fucking clue
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| Re: a comment on Snake in the Grass by thepinkbunnyofdoom |
6-Dec-05/1:33 PM |
Please, if I was writing to the tune of a song it'd be far more likely to an artist whose only emerged within the last 10 years.
Everything I write is awful. I could steal the writer's digest annual poetry competition's 1st place entry and you'd still think it was awful. I have 2 words for you, drop dead. It'd be far better than coming back here, where like it or not, your part of a warmachine controlled by a man whose snorted more coke at one time than most people will ever see in a lifetime.
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| Re: Ignorant Children by Stacy Stewart |
5-May-05/3:05 PM |
Eh? It's long, and stops to really interest around the Religious remark. Really liked the following lines.
"The Lawyers that must at times, swim against the hem of the sea;
therefore
meaning public opinion."
There is controling your audience, and then there are failed attempts. This was a fairly good attempt. Like Alizarin_Crimson said a nice start, now trim it. Get to your point sooner, and if it's going to look this bulky, Reclassify it as a Prose Poem please.
<3 Jason
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| Re: Void by darylchew |
3-May-05/2:29 PM |
The first two lines, were losing me, but by the last verse I really I was blown away.
"You read me a story, of true love in a false land;
but aren't we vulnerable when we're on our own?"
Love that line. Enough to be a 10.
<3 Jason
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| Re: Love without end by windyone |
3-May-05/2:29 PM |
"Pimple" look up the definition in the poem type. A -3- because it's painfully cliche.
<3 Jason
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| Re: Get Out Of My Life by Brittanyy |
3-May-05/2:29 PM |
"Pimple" Look up the defintion in poem types. -4- until it gets the right classification.
<3 Jason
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| Re: a comment on Next time by Billy Fights |
3-May-05/2:29 PM |
It's classified as a pimple, because the Idea's are Cliche as hell. Plus it's not finished. It still needs a verse or two. The second is strong but doesn't lead clearly into the third. Besides, I don't think I've seen an actually bad poem labeled pimple. It's freeverses I worry about.
<3 Jason
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| Re: PLEASE VOTE FOR MELANIE by wFraser Allonby Q.C.w |
3-May-05/2:29 PM |
Politics + Your Head = Gold
I assume this is about some British Election coming up?
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| Re: Grandma and Grandpa by jessicazee |
3-May-05/2:29 PM |
The first verse I think could use a little more effort put into the meter. Everything else seems to flow naturally, written to be read out loud. Interesting Story telling. -9-
<3 Jason
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| Re: Just Another Poem by Damien |
3-May-05/2:29 PM |
I'm a big fan of Math and Logic. However this is good stuff. -8-
<3 Jason
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| Re: Fingers Are Soldiers by somemorepoetry |
27-Apr-05/10:42 PM |
***Jawless comrades
***Gape at us with
***Broken, edited teeth.
Damn good images in this. Some of them bloody as hell, but damn good.
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| Re: I killed you in New Mexico by sunset sky |
27-Apr-05/10:30 PM |
2nd stanza is incredible. Why 5 lines in the other two stanzas? Why not just keep the lines "Kneeling and bleeding to death" and "I was your temple-worship Hand me down" as one line instead of two. I think the writing is better than the form here. Still a 10 in my book.
<3 Jason
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