Re: f*ckyouoldmenandyourrules by Damien_	19-Apr-05/12:01 AM
Seriously. Why do you censor yourself? What is the point of it? Censorship just seem like one of the rules you've some how retained I guess. You had me for awhile, before I got bored by shear length, and subject matter that I felt was being beat overly to death. Yes, it's okay to slam multiple poets in one post, No, it's not okay to slam multiple poets in one post given the amount of time, and the aforementioned droning subject. Ambition is a good thing to have. Eye strain however, sucks for poetry. -7- Because I liked alot of it. I just thought there was way too much of it.
Re: Gaping Hole by sonawrote	22-Apr-05/1:47 AM
A touch repetive, but I easily connected with this.
Re: All You Need Is Gloves by -=DIABETES=-	23-Apr-05/11:29 PM
No glove, no love. This needs some sex. I mean good, hard, 30 minute(because the hooker charges by the hour and it took about 25 minutes to get there) sex. Seriously though, "manufacturer", just doesn't work with how I'm reading this. Not to mention the fact that I was a little bored, and hoping either more lewd, or better writing from a -=_=-, even minus the _.
Re: Prickly Pear by Dovina	23-Apr-05/11:45 PM
Simple, but good. Athough you description of the defense is a little lite for my taste. It's a struggle for life, via conservative nature. If this isn't about a Cactus(at least somewhat), sorry for being stupid. <3 Jason
regarding some deleted poem...	24-Apr-05/5:15 PM
I believe it's petted(second to last line). Otherwise, this is more free verse than a prose poem. -8-
Re: spiritual living by mystic enoch	27-Apr-05/9:31 PM
"life changes, love doesn't." Think of how things sound if you read aloud. Didn't affect my vote, but I thought I'd mention it. -7-
regarding some deleted poem...	27-Apr-05/9:39 PM
As far a poems go, this is a dud.
Re: am i right? by celticskatermatt1	27-Apr-05/9:55 PM
Okay, a tip about poetry. Write like your on crack and seeing funny shit. In other words be inventive.
Re: Somehow, Hope by DeadtotheWorld	27-Apr-05/10:11 PM
I have to wonder, what the hell were you smoking? I can't even begin to tell you all the things that irritated me about this. Try not to use the same words repeatedly(Like 'many' for one example, there are plenty of other words that mean the exact same thing). I liked what I thought you were trying to get at here, but I hated how you tried to get there. -4-
Re: Your Mom, My Dad by jessicazee	27-Apr-05/10:23 PM
The line breaks could be better.
Re: I killed you in New Mexico by sunset sky	27-Apr-05/10:30 PM
2nd stanza is incredible. Why 5 lines in the other two stanzas? Why not just keep the lines "Kneeling and bleeding to death" and "I was your temple-worship Hand me down" as one line instead of two. I think the writing is better than the form here. Still a 10 in my book. <3 Jason
Re: Fingers Are Soldiers by somemorepoetry	27-Apr-05/10:42 PM
***Jawless comrades ***Gape at us with ***Broken, edited teeth. Damn good images in this. Some of them bloody as hell, but damn good.
Re: Get Out Of My Life by Brittanyy	3-May-05/2:29 PM
"Pimple" Look up the defintion in poem types. -4- until it gets the right classification. <3 Jason
Re: Love without end by windyone	3-May-05/2:29 PM
"Pimple" look up the definition in the poem type. A -3- because it's painfully cliche. <3 Jason
Re: Void by darylchew	3-May-05/2:29 PM
The first two lines, were losing me, but by the last verse I really I was blown away. "You read me a story, of true love in a false land; but aren't we vulnerable when we're on our own?" Love that line. Enough to be a 10. <3 Jason
Re: Just Another Poem by Damien	3-May-05/2:29 PM
I'm a big fan of Math and Logic. However this is good stuff. -8- <3 Jason
Re: Grandma and Grandpa by jessicazee	3-May-05/2:29 PM
The first verse I think could use a little more effort put into the meter. Everything else seems to flow naturally, written to be read out loud. Interesting Story telling. -9- <3 Jason
Re: PLEASE VOTE FOR MELANIE by wFraser Allonby Q.C.w	3-May-05/2:29 PM
Politics + Your Head = Gold I assume this is about some British Election coming up?
Re: Ignorant Children by Stacy Stewart	5-May-05/3:05 PM
Eh? It's long, and stops to really interest around the Religious remark. Really liked the following lines. "The Lawyers that must at times, swim against the hem of the sea; therefore meaning public opinion." There is controling your audience, and then there are failed attempts. This was a fairly good attempt. Like Alizarin_Crimson said a nice start, now trim it. Get to your point sooner, and if it's going to look this bulky, Reclassify it as a Prose Poem please. <3 Jason
regarding some deleted poem...	2-Feb-06/4:10 PM
After some rewrites and revisions, I think this would be really good.