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Void (Free verse) by darylchew
I wrote you a letter, without punc-
tuation. yet the words flow freely,
like the rivers of imagination, as it
depicts; the end of everything.
For aren't you already gone? Like the
whistle of the steel trains, resonating
in the air, hot steam gushing out of cold metal.
For isn't that what you do best?
You read me a story, of true love in a false land;
but aren't we vulnerable when we're on our own?
Isn't the impact of fact practical, that we know so little,
yet assume so much?
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Arithmetic Mean: 7.2
Weighted score: 5.2622466
Overall Rank: 3972
Posted: May 3, 2005 2:30 AM PDT; Last modified: May 3, 2005 2:30 AM PDT
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- no comma after 'letter'
- no comma after 'imagination'
- no semicolon after 'depicts'
- no comma after 'trains'
- no comma after 'story'
Go ahead, tell me you did it on purpose.