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Prickly Pear (Free verse) by Dovina
On San Gabriel Mountain slope Dry of summer, to your favor Wet of winter, to your demise Beyond your ecologic range At the edge of your existence You compete and sometime win Over manzanita, pine, and sage To your credit, a treat you offer To thirsty hikers who pay your price But around your sweet and juicy fruit A wicked fence of needles I cannot blame one so defended Can't find words to preach for change Or advise you to become unoffensive Like the smooth and tender plum Your disposition rejects most folks They see your thorns and walk away But a more delicious conversation I can't remember Than with you, my friend Your thorns removed Your soul revealed

Up the ladder: Razor Blade Romance
Down the ladder: Oceans love song

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Arithmetic Mean: 6.6
Weighted score: 5.190725
Overall Rank: 4695
Posted: April 22, 2005 10:43 AM PDT; Last modified: April 22, 2005 10:43 AM PDT
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[9] INTRANSIT @ 204.110.228.254 | 22-Apr-05/1:41 PM | Reply
I thought about p/p when I wrote my villanelle. I .just couldn't get it to work.

Is this zodiac? Or our very own Browne recluse?
[8] zodiac @ 81.10.126.152 > INTRANSIT | 22-Apr-05/1:43 PM | Reply
No, it's almost surely Dovina.
[9] INTRANSIT @ 204.110.228.254 > zodiac | 22-Apr-05/2:02 PM | Reply
she's fondling her prickly pears? wha?
[n/a] Dovina @ 204.250.12.246 > INTRANSIT | 22-Apr-05/2:43 PM | Reply
You're both wrong.
[8] thepinkbunnyofdoom @ 4.224.24.116 | 23-Apr-05/11:45 PM | Reply
Simple, but good. Athough you description of the defense is a little lite for my taste. It's a struggle for life, via conservative nature. If this isn't about a Cactus(at least somewhat), sorry for being stupid.

<3 Jason
[n/a] Dovina @ 204.250.12.246 > thepinkbunnyofdoom | 24-Apr-05/3:28 AM | Reply
Although it is somewhat about a cactus, I am happy that someone noticed it might also be about more. Yeah, the thorns could be described in terms of the violent struggle for life in nature and society; I chose to downplay them.
[8] Bankrupt_Word_Clerk @ 69.231.20.35 | 14-Jun-05/12:58 AM | Reply
I self-define as a cactus that wants a hug.
and I stare at the San Bernardino mountains and hope the fires don't start again.. .but with all the rain... who knows?
[n/a] Dovina @ 69.175.32.185 > Bankrupt_Word_Clerk | 14-Jun-05/9:25 AM | Reply
By Job, you’ve got it.
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