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Snake in the Grass (Free verse) by thepinkbunnyofdoom
(Beware Of Those With Big Ears and Padded Souls) Call me dramatic, call me what you will Its my own damn fault, for letting my thoughts spill Pour whatever venom you have currently residing in your mouth But know that unlike the others I'm not blinded by the south I'm listening and your every breath is a puzzle piece Locking together the components of a weapon demanding release Held in wait by a double sided devil and a deep rooted fear of death Until that final glorious moment when the both of us have nothing left Then shall I bare the blade that cuts rivers in flesh and lines snow Slicing at your throat as the weather brings your nose to blow So that you may sneak your last poisons into my broken head And I may smile as they lay you in your final bed Thinking thoughts of a dark parade to set your remains in some tomb You, the waste who would have been better wasted inside the womb So that want might be replaced with wonder for what you might be Yet instead we the world were allowed to see Snake in the grass, Your time has come and is long past The only question left is, How long will the rabbit's restraint last

Up the ladder: Shattered
Down the ladder: The Awakening

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Arithmetic Mean: 6.75
Weighted score: 5.2086053
Overall Rank: 4488
Posted: December 5, 2005 12:40 PM PST; Last modified: December 5, 2005 12:40 PM PST
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[7] wilco @ 24.92.74.122 | 5-Dec-05/1:54 PM | Reply
Is this to be sung to the tune of Bob Seger's "Old Time Rock & Roll"?
[n/a] zodiac @ 212.38.134.51 > wilco | 6-Dec-05/1:44 AM | Reply
By way of Jimmy Buffet's "Margaritaville".

This is simply awful. Between this and Dovina's Hollidday poem, I'm wondering if there's any America left to come home to.
[n/a] thepinkbunnyofdoom @ 66.213.67.10 > zodiac | 6-Dec-05/1:33 PM | Reply
Please, if I was writing to the tune of a song it'd be far more likely to an artist whose only emerged within the last 10 years.

Everything I write is awful. I could steal the writer's digest annual poetry competition's 1st place entry and you'd still think it was awful. I have 2 words for you, drop dead. It'd be far better than coming back here, where like it or not, your part of a warmachine controlled by a man whose snorted more coke at one time than most people will ever see in a lifetime.
[n/a] zodiac @ 212.38.134.51 > thepinkbunnyofdoom | 7-Dec-05/12:50 AM | Reply
Ooh, righteous indignation! Why are you ripping off 80s lyrics then?

Go fuck yourself. Everything you write is awful because where anybody else would have taken some of his readers' advice and stopped writing the same crap with the same mistakes all the fucking time, you seem to have preferred sticking your head in a clothes dryer and hitting 'Go'.
[n/a] thepinkbunnyofdoom @ 66.213.67.10 > zodiac | 8-Dec-05/3:16 PM | Reply
Ripping off 80s lyrics? The only music from the 80s I have listened to is a few punk rock bands, and even then I haven't listened to them since I was 19. During the 80s when I was a small child my parents only listened to country and the beatles, so... I don't think I could possibly know I was ripping off 80s lyrics.

As for the rest of that, fuck you too. I was having a bad day when I read your last comment and I'm have a worse one today. As for writing the same crap, I'm fucking 21. Lot of life experiance that gives me huh? Same mistakes, how ever will I know that they are mistakes unless someone points them out to me(Besides the dryer doesn't even fucking start until you close the door, and we both know my head is way to big to let the dryer close)?

Sorry I snapped, but oh well, goto hell, and the whatever else

Later Daze

<3 Jason
[n/a] ALChemy @ 24.74.101.159 | 5-Dec-05/3:25 PM | Reply
Answer the question at the bottom for me please:

This is a story about a girl.

While at the funeral of her own mother, she met a guy whom she did not know. She thought this guy was amazing, so much the dream guy that she was searching for that she fell in love with him immediately.

However, she never asked for his name or number and afterward could not find anyone who knew who he was.

A few days later the girl killed her own sister.

Question: Why did she kill her sister?
[n/a] thepinkbunnyofdoom @ 66.213.67.10 > ALChemy | 6-Dec-05/1:40 PM | Reply
The smart ass answer

1. Mental instability, perhaps a long standing grude, and opportunity.

The Stab in the Dark Answer

2. The man was her sister

A further Stab in the Dark Answer

3. The man was her sister and she fucked him before being told his true identity

A far fetched idea

4. It's really complicated and involves being ones own grandmother type shit. I'm sure you don't want to even hear that one.

And my honest answer

5. I have no fucking clue
[n/a] ALChemy @ 24.74.101.159 > thepinkbunnyofdoom | 6-Dec-05/4:29 PM | Reply
Actually I meant it as a rhetorical question. See this is a famous question/urban legion that a supposed prominent psychologist devised to separate those potential psychopaths from the normal folk.
The psychopathic answer: She killed her sister in the hope that he'd show up at yet another family funeral.
So congrats, you're not a psycho. Maybe a little schizoid with the multiple answers and all but most of us here are a little wacky like that.
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