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kruder&dorfmeister (Free verse) by rockinindividual
it was coffee shop music
for lack of better words
it was drums pounding rhythms
and a voice crying out
mutilated songs
that were sewn back together
a mass of scar tissue
glossy and smooth
you could say glossy and smooth, i suppose
but you'd be forgetting those drums
reverberating from rainforests
and that voice
that sexy sultry voice
drifting from jazzy coffee shops
you could say sexy and sultry, i suppose
but then you're hit by a power chord fusion
sending an electric current through us all
widening our eyes and powering our hips
filling our souls with a persistent pulsing dance beat
escalating as our feet can't stand still
you could say persistent and pulsing, i suppose
but just when you think it will explode with emotion,
it loses energy and power
stripping down to the bare soul
leaving nothing but that voice
whispering carefully chosen words
that weave through your mind
brushing your lips with smiles
it may not have a name
it may not have a genre
a windowless airless box
leaving no room to breathe
but thats all the better, i say
breathe, i say
fill your lungs with air
and exhale your nameless music
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Overall Rank: 9046
Posted: April 16, 2003 1:48 PM PDT; Last modified: May 1, 2003 6:05 PM PDT
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I might have to think about this for awhile..because..i can't decide whether captitalization would work better for this one..I know it's not your style..but sometimes they flow better..or whatever..
I LOVE THIS!..mmm 10..i am thinking..