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Sweet Dreams (Free verse) by d35
Taking a sledgehammer to a mirror for reflections come without image & “Just one of u is enough,” they say. Shards of glass now ready, to bleed the pain away. It would be so easy to take the aura of what makes a heart beat, sweet dreams. She was a sorry sight, black tears of mascara bleed from her eyes & stain skin. Wallowing on the edge, on the edge of her apartment complex, in a nightgown to blend with a fall to nothing, & a funeral that would end everything. He was high and planned on hell, a teenage dropout with a syringe. Laying ready in a bathtub, sick of bathing in his own depression, with a half empty bottle of vodka perched to his side, & a handful of aspirin to relieve the pain. Tastes that can’t be ignored & soon an idea will be a reality, u will swim in the sea of the undead not welcomed on any level, sweet dreams.

Up the ladder: rapping on caffeine
Down the ladder: The Day The World Blew Away

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Arithmetic Mean: 5.5454545
Weighted score: 5.2727275
Overall Rank: 3801
Posted: April 17, 2003 1:55 PM PDT; Last modified: April 17, 2003 1:55 PM PDT
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Comments:
[7] thepinkbunnyofdoom @ 24.209.19.37 | 18-Apr-03/1:03 PM | Reply
This tale of suicide could use a little work. Connect the events. -7-
[n/a] d35 @ 64.12.96.234 > thepinkbunnyofdoom | 19-Apr-03/8:19 PM | Reply
yea maybe, thanx
[8] deleted user @ 205.188.209.7 | 29-Apr-03/5:27 PM | Reply
yea, connect the events it would then be much better, still good story -8-
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