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Member since 2002 · Posted 8 Oct 2002 · Edited 8 Oct 2002 · 6 comments

i have seen the hills the nameless fury in all directions i have seen you standing alone face pointed toward the sullen sky i have seen innate notions passed along from black to white i have seen great people live and die by the frailty of life i have seen her fading slowly away from ecstasy

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[7] god'swife 8-Oct-02/11:37 PM Reply

Ilike this. Except for "live and die..." how does one live and die by fraility. I'm not getting it. The last couplet is strong, sensual and sad. For your mere 19, not bad at all. 19, good god.

[n/a] blackball › god'swife 8-Oct-02/11:41 PM Reply

i guess what i meant to say was that we are all frail...we live we die...it's the way life goes...it also might have to do with the fact that iwas thinking it up as i was typing it...i dunno

[7] devina 9-Oct-02/3:28 AM Reply

I liked, it was a short poem, but it said so much.

[6] Nicholas Jones 9-Oct-02/5:30 AM Reply

Simplicity is often very effective, as it is here. But the poem itself speaks of complexity, if innate notions can change from black to white, all stability is destroyed.

[10] razorgrin 9-Oct-02/7:03 AM Reply

That's really damn good. Short but says a lot.

[7] nonee 20-Oct-02/12:07 AM Reply

it's good