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rapping on caffeine (Free verse) by blackball

i have seen the hills the nameless fury in all directions i have seen you standing alone face pointed toward the sullen sky i have seen innate notions passed along from black to white i have seen great people live and die by the frailty of life i have seen her fading slowly away from ecstasy

god'swife 8-Oct-02/11:37 PM
Ilike this. Except for "live and die..." how does one live and die by fraility. I'm not getting it. The last couplet is strong, sensual and sad. For your mere 19, not bad at all. 19, good god.




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