Re: George Bush, Jesus Christ, and the good ole US of A! by dougsoderstrom	26-May-03/10:02 PM
Christain, Christain, Christian. Jesu have mercy on your soul, you take one concept and apply it while forgetting all the rest. For instance, Judge lest not ye be judged, love thy neighbor, and you ignore the majority of christian history. How many crusades have there been? George's point of view(or the one he has tryed to express) is that he is helping his nieghbor(Iraq) by being its doctor and cutting out the diseased tissue. Look you have faith in god right? Well I have to call you one of little faith. If god, has a plan for everything, than he has a reason to have W. leading our nation. Cap him all you want but don't dog his faith cause you don't believe that for whatever reason he should be there. P.S. Christ is supposedly perfect, Men are not. Remember that.
Re: Fit for a King by dougsoderstrom	26-May-03/9:45 PM
Left Wing all the way, even if I some what agree with what you have to say, more opinion that poem. Try maybe you should try ryhming.
Re: Death by dougsoderstrom	26-May-03/9:40 PM
Decent but as I'm sure you've been told runs long
Re: On Wanting to Know The Truth by dougsoderstrom	26-May-03/9:39 PM
Better than what I've read so far but still not quite "free thinking enough"
Re: An Anthem for Peace by dougsoderstrom	26-May-03/9:35 PM
Yig! I say, Sure you got a message but your just saying it with no style, no flare, no room for any intereptation. Try giving a little effort at being poetic.
Re: blockbuster by bondjedi	26-May-03/9:12 PM
Such Talent such skill, brings a tear to my eye. Since I did get a good Laugh (We're talking 3 whole minutes here) -10-.
Re: The Best This Dream Can Offer by Deborah Carter	26-May-03/9:09 PM
Haha, sorry... I try and see the best in poems but this one didn't seem to make me feel anything at all. I'll say this for you, you managed you be a little chiche, without diving off the deep end but your words fail to make any emotion conection to me. Not Bad, Not Good. Nothing really outstanding other than it doesn't strike me as either good writing or bad. Since I feel neutral to this poem -5-.
Re: Fit In by A Simple Poet 123	26-May-03/8:59 PM
Hmmm... D.A.'s Vote here with a so much as a real word surprises me. Personally I thought this was good but not worthy of 10. I'd say more like an 8. Its good but just a little cliche, don't ask me how it manages not to be.
Re: Talking... by thirdchildofpain	24-May-03/4:25 PM
Some style some flare but not really much there -6-
Re: a comment on My nieghborhood(1) by thepinkbunnyofdoom	17-May-03/4:24 PM
Gald you like it there is more to come, and If I get some useful suggestions I'll make this better as well. :)
Re: a comment on My Nieghborhood(2) by thepinkbunnyofdoom	17-May-03/4:21 PM
Trust me the first one was this bad once too. They are all a work in progress. Just wait it'll get better, or I'll scrap it and write a replacement.
Re: The windshield-wiper blues by INTRANSIT	17-May-03/2:47 PM
Whats a speedo working or not have to do with a truck? I'd give you the money to you if I wasn't planning on buying a drumset, 4 ounces of joy, and fixing my own car. -6-
Re: a comment on My nieghborhood(1) by thepinkbunnyofdoom	17-May-03/1:45 PM
Thanx. I will I like most of it the way it is but the last verse just doesn't seem to work. Any suggestions?. I plan on making this a series.
Re: Sanctuary by Lolly	14-May-03/7:17 PM
Well Said. -10-
Re: Search Engine by OneFingerAnswer	14-May-03/7:13 PM
Deeply touching but I'm not sure why. -10-
Re: long time no write by New Life Drug	10-May-03/12:06 AM
A woman after my own heart -9-
Re: My final poem by lee's tommy	9-May-03/11:48 PM
Hmmmm... A little melodramatic and defiantly not worthy of a darwin awarde. Try being either steping out of the norm, in how you kill yourself or describe it in a very detailed account till either the point of; last dying breath, lost strengh to continue writing, or shortly after regret for taking your life has just begun(anything longer than 3 lines there tends to get old). I prefer an odd way to die mixed with lose of ablitity to write further. -3-
Re: Sanctuary by Lolly	9-May-03/11:37 PM
consider these as replacing your last lines with(walls within, hidden behind my thick skin) -9-
Re: a comment on This makes no sense by thepinkbunnyofdoom	8-May-03/7:42 PM
I was going for silly but hey close enough.
Re: Totem Pole by horus8	8-May-03/5:16 PM
Seems to me that there are a few awkward places if I read it out loud. Other than the "We've got a hundred reasons to live;" it seems to extend just about a breath too far compared to the rest of the lyric. Very nice tho -9-