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My nieghborhood(1) (Lyric) by thepinkbunnyofdoom My neighbor is in the KKK
A proud member of the NRA
Since 1984
So donât knock on his door
His wife isnât very thin
She wears shirts that cut into her skin
Her lungs get smaller by the hours
From all the Marlboro lights she devours
Their 13-year-old daughter dances naked for all the world to see
Her window is the one right across from me
Sheâs looking for sex cause she doesnât know love
Has no clue, No idea about the meaning of
Come 6 oâclock without fail is world war 3
How they survive is mystery to me
Up the ladder:
Brighter
Down the ladder:
Camera Obscura
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Posted: May 17, 2003 1:29 PM PDT; Last modified: January 9, 2005 4:14 PM PSTWeighted score: 5.907677 Overall Rank: 1447 Comments:
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INTRANSIT @ 64.12.96.46
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17-May-03/1:33 PM
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rewrite. and concentrate on giving this a beat. it's well done and deserves the attention. tend to it.7 looking for a 9
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thepinkbunnyofdoom @ 24.209.21.223
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17-May-03/1:45 PM
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Thanx. I will I like most of it the way it is but the last verse just doesn't seem to work. Any suggestions?. I plan on making this a series.
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thepinkbunnyofdoom @ 24.209.21.223
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30-Jun-03/2:24 PM
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Its very off tempo but what can I say I was inspired by reading the canterbary tales again. I love Chaucer. So I thought I'd borrow some of his style. Its a great Idea but Other than the first and third verse I can't really picture it right in my head. Its not how I want it but its close. Grrr....
Pretty good!
Gald you like it there is more to come, and If I get some useful suggestions I'll make this better as well. :)
yeah, this needs to be longer.
And consider something else besides the hours/devours couplet. good stuff. 301 view(s)
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