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This makes no sense (Free verse) by thepinkbunnyofdoom
Don’t know why I’m so upset I should be happy for you And I’m not alone anymore Don’t know what I was hoping for There is no bridge between the gap That great divide that we call years I just don’t know why we couldn’t look Just in case? The Ironic thing about it all Is that Appearances would have deceived When I told you my age you didn’t believe Oh how now I wish I’d lied Shaved off just 2 years You’d have never known But I thought that you were older And I had so much fun Convincing myself that it’d work out But it never works out, does it? Didn’t think so and now I’m feeling blue Hurting cause I know I can’t have you Writing words that have been said a thousand times before In ways so much better than what I’m using now But this is the best that I can do And I know that I shouldn’t be so upset but I am Why Why Why Couldn’t we try?

Down the ladder: Reaching Out

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Arithmetic Mean: 7.5
Weighted score: 6.8276463
Overall Rank: 359
Posted: May 8, 2003 5:09 PM PDT; Last modified: May 8, 2003 5:09 PM PDT
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[8] horus8 @ 24.126.113.154 | 8-May-03/7:05 PM | Reply
This is very funny. I hope it was supposed to be right? Because it's very funny.
[n/a] thepinkbunnyofdoom @ 24.209.21.223 > horus8 | 8-May-03/7:42 PM | Reply
I was going for silly but hey close enough.
[n/a] thepinkbunnyofdoom @ 24.209.21.223 > thepinkbunnyofdoom | 30-Jun-03/2:19 PM | Reply
This isn't about being a pediofile, Its about realising that bridge between teenage boyhood, and manhood, and wanting to be able to do the things you could do if you were on the otherside of the age line.
[7] richa @ 195.92.168.173 | 9-May-03/10:55 AM | Reply
Like the second verse, quite clever.
and perceptive too
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