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Totem Pole (Lyric) by horus8
We've got the rockets We've got the shakes We've got underground nuclear test sites causing earthquakes. She's got the cauldron She's got the boil She's got her fingers deep in my mind Like a spring I must recoil. We've got the fuel We've got the well We've got a pipeline straight from Alaska To the gates of hell. Chicks on bikes River dikes Cops in cars Topless bars Snakes and toads Secret codes Eighteen wheelers Toxic loads. We've got the rockets We've got the shakes We've got a hundred reasons to live; half of them are fake. She's got the fire She's got the spell She has an answer for every question, but she will never tell. Unless you’ve got some money Then put it in her hand The truth is what you'll find in the structure of a man. We've got the chain We've got the hole We've got a million faces with no names on this totem pole. Chicks on bikes River dikes Cops in cars Topless bars Snakes and toads Secret codes Eighteen wheelers Toxic loads. God's image in god's image inside god's image The beating heart stops.

Up the ladder: Sunset At Fountain
Down the ladder: older sister

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Arithmetic Mean: 5.5625
Weighted score: 5.4954486
Overall Rank: 2758
Posted: May 8, 2003 2:43 PM PDT; Last modified: May 8, 2003 2:43 PM PDT
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[9] thepinkbunnyofdoom @ 24.209.21.223 | 8-May-03/5:16 PM | Reply
Seems to me that there are a few awkward places if I read it out loud. Other than the "We've got a hundred reasons to live;" it seems to extend just about a breath too far compared to the rest of the lyric. Very nice tho -9-
[n/a] horus8 @ 24.126.113.154 > thepinkbunnyofdoom | 8-May-03/6:37 PM | Reply
Yeah, it's a song so, that's just one of those places where your voice's tempo has to stutter jam like bob dillon. Where you sing on the up and down beat. I have a version recorded, perhaps you'll here it soon, and dig on what i'm jiving at.
[3] psikosis @ 66.41.25.70 | 9-May-03/10:31 AM | Reply
decent lyrics horus, but a part in there reminds me, in fact, it is taken right from a doors song...cops in cars, the topless bars...never saw a woman, so alone...ring a bell?! Try to be more original. The rest was pretty cool, reminded me of System of a Down.
[8] richa @ 195.92.168.173 | 9-May-03/10:51 AM | Reply
Yes bob dylas an influence to me, like the stuff about reasons to live/ earthquake shelters/ pipelines
[8] richa @ 195.92.168.173 > richa | 9-May-03/10:52 AM | Reply
I quite like bob dylan too
[10] INTRANSIT @ 152.163.252.72 | 18-May-03/8:39 AM | Reply
gotta run around the poemranker store and play kechup.
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