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Free verse № 97869

Loneliness

by tuthaliash

Member since 2003 · Posted 20 Apr 2004 · 5 comments

With furtive passion I kiss the back of my own hand And spoon my pillow In the dark

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5 comments

[7] wilco 20-Apr-04/5:20 PM Reply
Yep...thats lonely...
[7] deleted user 20-Apr-04/6:51 PM Reply
Why don't you lose a few words and make it a haiku?
[n/a] Tintagiles 20-Apr-04/7:20 PM Reply
Hmm. On the one hand, as hypatia said, you could turn it into a haoku, thus:

With furtive passion
I kiss the back of my hand
And spoon my pillow

That, however, would have the result of its ending with the line 'I spoon my pillow'. Which is going to turn this into a comedy, which I presume is not the intent.
[8] MacFrantic 21-Apr-04/11:45 AM Reply
"Furtive" alone makes this poem fly. I'm impressed by your ability to capture the moment. *8*
[10] Stephen Robins 12-Jan-07/7:15 AM Reply
You too, sweet!