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He (Free verse) by BigB
He longed for you. But where were you? You came and went. He said to you. But were you listening? You shut your ears. He stood and waited. But you never did came. You were cuddled in another's arms. And now you'll pay.

Up the ladder: Green
Down the ladder: weeping tree

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Arithmetic Mean: 6.857143
Weighted score: 5.4994626
Overall Rank: 2742
Posted: August 30, 2004 7:32 AM PDT; Last modified: August 30, 2004 7:32 AM PDT
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Comments:
[7] Dovina @ 24.52.157.176 | 30-Aug-04/9:47 AM | Reply
Too many possible interpretations for my taste. I'm sure you know what you mean, and if I did, I would probably like this poem better.
[5] Bachus @ 24.130.62.63 | 30-Aug-04/11:02 AM | Reply
"But you never did came"? Good one, very Arkansass.
[n/a] BigB @ 202.156.2.50 | 31-Aug-04/6:26 AM | Reply
agreed. I'll take note.
[10] Brandy_n_Cali @ 4.182.108.165 | 31-Aug-04/8:11 PM | Reply
NICE POEM!!! TRULY!!!
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