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He (Free verse) by BigB He longed for you.
But where were you?
You came and went.
He said to you.
But were you listening?
You shut your ears.
He stood and waited.
But you never did came.
You were cuddled in another's arms.
And now you'll pay.
Up the ladder:
The Gala Apple
Down the ladder:
To Leave a Trace
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Posted: August 30, 2004 7:32 AM PDT; Last modified: August 30, 2004 7:32 AM PDTWeighted score: 5.4994626 Overall Rank: 2738 Comments:
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Dovina @ 24.52.157.176
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30-Aug-04/9:47 AM
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Too many possible interpretations for my taste. I'm sure you know what you mean, and if I did, I would probably like this poem better.
"But you never did came"? Good one, very Arkansass.
agreed. I'll take note.
NICE POEM!!! TRULY!!!
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