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Loneliness (Free verse) by tuthaliash

With furtive passion I kiss the back of my own hand And spoon my pillow In the dark

Tintagiles 20-Apr-04/7:20 PM
Hmm. On the one hand, as hypatia said, you could turn it into a haoku, thus:

With furtive passion
I kiss the back of my hand
And spoon my pillow

That, however, would have the result of its ending with the line 'I spoon my pillow'. Which is going to turn this into a comedy, which I presume is not the intent.




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