replying on Love poem by thavimatola
29 Sep 2003, 7:26 AM
I've been off a while, is this checklist something new?
on Love poem by thavimatola
29 Sep 2003, 7:23 AM
are the hands moon-bathed or light bulb lit? i can't see how they can be both--or how you could type by moonlight.
on Your Inner Ear by razorgrin
26 Sep 2003, 11:26 AM
It's not every day you see a haiku with the word vstibular in it.
on The fetus farm by horus8
26 Sep 2003, 11:25 AM
Lovely, and true. Teen pregnancies skyrocket in June.
on Sexually mine! by LuckyJoe
26 Sep 2003, 11:23 AM
sounds like a showtune. I don't know why.
on AND A NICE CUP OF CHAR by Garrett S Sexton
26 Sep 2003, 11:22 AM
Sounds about right. Don't forget Graham Norton.
on Life's Work by baughworm
26 Sep 2003, 11:20 AM
feels as though there should be more. The circular pattern of the shovel is almost predicatable--perhaps you could prolong this with a few more stanzas in between.
on I am the gayest by walrus8
21 Jul 2003, 9:30 AM
A loverly poem, indeed, Mr Gayness... excellent execution of rhythm and wit. 10
on null by Bill Z Bub
21 Jul 2003, 8:59 AM
Fantastic. but why is this a pimple poem?
on hermetic by Bill Z Bub
21 Jul 2003, 8:56 AM
Holy shit this was fucking awesome. Anyone for a game of lawn jarts?
on Fatty Nerd Trilogy by Agemo-Z
16 May 2003, 5:38 AM
I once worked in a job where there was a rule about no bare midriffs. it was a rule meant for the ladies, I'm guessing becasue of the fear of horny bosses, but that's not important. what is important is that there was this ridiculously fat guy named jeremy who was fat in many ways, resembling a single celled organism. his belly used to sneak out of his shirt and hang down 6-8 inches below his belt, like jabba the hut's tongue.
on Fatty Nerd Trilogy by Agemo-Z
16 May 2003, 5:37 AM
I onece worked in a job where there was a rule about no bare midriffs. it was a rule meant for the ladies, I'm guessing becasue of the fear of horny bosses, but that's not important. what is important is that there was this ridiculously fat guy named jeremy who was fat in many ways, resembling a single celled organism. his belly used to sneak out of his shirt and hang down 6-8 inches below his belt, like jabba the hut's tongue.
on Hefty Smurf by Bachus
16 May 2003, 5:33 AM
I'd like to see all these smurf ones a sone big series
on Happy Cancer! by Agemo-Z
16 May 2003, 5:33 AM
you've nailed down the sense of mystery--so much that I have no idea what the hell this is supposed to be. but I like it.
on A Buncha Dungeons and Dragons Haiku by razorgrin
16 May 2003, 5:32 AM
I'm Unfamiliar
And if I mentioned his name I would upset my Mum.
I thought that this meant your mom was cheating and she felt guilty if you talked of her lover who would show up after your dad went to work. But the end makes it sound like your dad left and was gone forever.
I think the pronoun usage in the lines above are confusing and I don't know who you are talking about. this coinfusion muddies up the meaning of your poem.