replying on "Mute nostril agony" Titled & inspired by Frass. by Bachus
23 Apr 2003, 11:30 AM
No worries!
replying on Havin a Slash by Blade
23 Apr 2003, 11:25 AM
Kickass!
on Loss I havn't yet known by cleverdevice
23 Apr 2003, 11:19 AM
Hey cd how's it going? Have you revised anything yet? I most definitely haven't. Ah well.
Nice poem, short (heh, it's a haiku), blunt and certainly true. It's already garnered a 7 so that shall be the standard by which I shall follow. Good Evening, sir!
Nice poem, short (heh, it's a haiku), blunt and certainly true. It's already garnered a 7 so that shall be the standard by which I shall follow. Good Evening, sir!
on Havin a Slash by Blade
22 Apr 2003, 10:23 AM
Dude, what the fuck? I assume you're not talking about your own brain, cause on the evidence of this you wouldn't even notice if you shat it out. Funny poem though...
(0 to try and get you into the bottom 15)
(0 to try and get you into the bottom 15)
on For my wife by INTRANSIT
22 Apr 2003, 10:20 AM
Even better! The breeze is used much more effectively this time. 9
replying on Blackbird & the Everlasting Dream by Ranger
22 Apr 2003, 10:15 AM
Cheers bud, I'll have a look and see what it's like in sonnet form.
on This Night by adrenalize
20 Apr 2003, 1:37 AM
Make this one far more erotic.
on Dreams by adrenalize
20 Apr 2003, 1:36 AM
Yes, I agree. Surely nitol is the answer?
on Salt Water by OneFingerAnswer
20 Apr 2003, 1:29 AM
Beautiful, if you can excuse me being British. I think line 3 is the best. 8
(As an alternative word for silly, maybe you could actually use 'childish'? Just a suggestion).
(As an alternative word for silly, maybe you could actually use 'childish'? Just a suggestion).
on Sarah by talking_goldfish
20 Apr 2003, 1:22 AM
Very nice!
on When the Future Comes to Pass by e1ementfire
20 Apr 2003, 1:17 AM
Sounds like Corrosion of Conformity. Now whatever happened to them...
replying on "Mute nostril agony" Titled & inspired by Frass. by Bachus
20 Apr 2003, 1:07 AM
Excuse me? I have nothing wrong with the z, I was just saying that there's only one p. You seem to have misunderstood the fact that I said this poem's great and just has one typo. Is that a crime?
on I'm a ghost by Mutant_X
19 Apr 2003, 1:27 AM
There's definitely potential here. I would like to see it more emotive rather than all the emphasis being put on rhyme, but it depends on how you want it. 7 anyway, nice work.
replying on Blackbird & the Everlasting Dream by Ranger
18 Apr 2003, 1:38 PM
Thanks Lunar, it's nice to see that there are some believers after all, hee hee!
Hey, an 8's a nice score-not stingy at all!
See you soon (happy Easter)
xxx
Hey, an 8's a nice score-not stingy at all!
See you soon (happy Easter)
xxx
replying on Toute ma Vie by talking_goldfish
18 Apr 2003, 1:35 PM
Ah, I see you're from bonny ol' Britain too! Good evening then!
replying on Toute ma Vie by talking_goldfish
18 Apr 2003, 1:34 PM
That's okay. Nice to see some adventure in the poetry on this site. Now we know that you can do this try to do something more extravagent. You're obviously talented at this, so give me something to smile about!
Good evening (over here it is anyway)!
Good evening (over here it is anyway)!
replying on won't let out by Freethinker1602
18 Apr 2003, 1:26 AM
How about pi? Try maths. Or then again...
Weebl is The Man.
Weebl is The Man.
replying on psudobackstabber by Freethinker1602
18 Apr 2003, 1:24 AM
Ouch. Being betrayed by friends is the harshest thing in the world.
If I was a knowledgeable person I might be able to offer some advice, but it isn't my business either.
If I was a knowledgeable person I might be able to offer some advice, but it isn't my business either.
Anyways, I like the ending here-I'll give it an 8
Good morning everybody (unless you're over here in which case Good evening)