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I'm a ghost (Free verse) by Mutant_X I shout at you
But you dont hear me
I reach out to hold you
But you don't see me
I hear you cry
I say i'm sorry and i sing you you a lullaby
I tell you a story
About love and it's great glory
But you dont hear me
And you don't feel me
You think i'm dead
But i'm still here,
I'm that thought inside your head
Yeah,i'm a ghost
Yeah,i'm that dead.
Up the ladder:
Leaves
Down the ladder:
we're insane
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Posted: April 19, 2003 12:47 AM PDT; Last modified: April 19, 2003 12:47 AM PDTWeighted score: 4.9205313 Overall Rank: 9426 Comments:
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Ranger @ 213.1.45.6
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19-Apr-03/1:27 AM
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There's definitely potential here. I would like to see it more emotive rather than all the emphasis being put on rhyme, but it depends on how you want it. 7 anyway, nice work.
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