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I'm a ghost (Free verse) by Mutant_X
I shout at you But you dont hear me I reach out to hold you But you don't see me I hear you cry I say i'm sorry and i sing you you a lullaby I tell you a story About love and it's great glory But you dont hear me And you don't feel me You think i'm dead But i'm still here, I'm that thought inside your head Yeah,i'm a ghost Yeah,i'm that dead.

Up the ladder: Leaves
Down the ladder: we're insane

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Arithmetic Mean: 4.3333335
Weighted score: 4.9205313
Overall Rank: 9421
Posted: April 19, 2003 12:47 AM PDT; Last modified: April 19, 2003 12:47 AM PDT
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[7] Ranger @ 213.1.45.6 | 19-Apr-03/1:27 AM | Reply
There's definitely potential here. I would like to see it more emotive rather than all the emphasis being put on rhyme, but it depends on how you want it. 7 anyway, nice work.
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