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I'm a ghost (Free verse) by Mutant_X

I shout at you But you dont hear me I reach out to hold you But you don't see me I hear you cry I say i'm sorry and i sing you you a lullaby I tell you a story About love and it's great glory But you dont hear me And you don't feel me You think i'm dead But i'm still here, I'm that thought inside your head Yeah,i'm a ghost Yeah,i'm that dead.

Ranger 19-Apr-03/1:27 AM
There's definitely potential here. I would like to see it more emotive rather than all the emphasis being put on rhyme, but it depends on how you want it. 7 anyway, nice work.




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