| Re: Small Town Tavern by NinjaPoet |
30-Jan-03/11:21 AM |
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Wonderful ending. 'bsolutely wonderful.
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| Re: As I lay by Katie |
31-Jan-03/12:42 PM |
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In my opinion this is too much just a letter. Split the lines a bit. I agree with brokenwing, this does have potential, but I don't think that this is fully complete. Keep at it.
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| Re: Elegy by Quarton |
31-Jan-03/12:45 PM |
Yep, I like it-it's a lyric, not a free verse as far as I can see. Good stuff.
If you read my latest attempt you'll see that Icarus doesn't need his wings, he's got a plane.
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| Re: A Little Nightmare by Teen14 |
31-Jan-03/12:47 PM |
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Bold, straight to the point although I still don't know what the nightmare is.
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| Re: All I Feel by brokenwing |
31-Jan-03/12:52 PM |
'Fluorescent'
Like the poem, it is one of your best.
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| Re: Despair by Caducus |
31-Jan-03/12:56 PM |
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Caducus, perhaps you should split it up so that the 'forgive me's are in seperate stanzas from the rest? It might add a little to the structure.
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| Re: Lovers Game by scitz |
31-Jan-03/12:58 PM |
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Pretty good. sado-masochism I believe has a wossname, hyphon type thing in between.
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31-Jan-03/1:01 PM |
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I really like the poem. Third line should start "There's", other than that it's great!
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| Re: Because The Ground Is Still Frozen by razorgrin |
31-Jan-03/1:02 PM |
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| Re: The Merry Man by Teen14 |
1-Feb-03/9:24 AM |
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| Re: Impossibilities, and Marvel Comical Heroes. by Bachus |
1-Feb-03/9:26 AM |
Wowee wow! Fun fun fun!
Is it only a third of Americans that believe that?
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| Re: Spring Delight by Teen14 |
1-Feb-03/9:28 AM |
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Lovely. Spring rolls as well (I'm shamelessly self-promoting).
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| Re: Run Forest! Run... by Bachus |
1-Feb-03/9:29 AM |
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This is by far your best work!!!
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| Re: Slow motion by INTRANSIT |
1-Feb-03/11:08 PM |
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Has a lot of potential, mr intransit. Keep going, though, I agree with the above comment, it does need a bit more.
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| Re: An Ode to the professor, but not Marianne by Jeremi B. Handrinos |
5-Feb-03/12:12 PM |
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| Re: Charles and Eddie by Nicholas Jones |
5-Feb-03/12:17 PM |
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Whoaaaa, weird at first...I think in my confusion I'll give an 8
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| Re: The Marble Jar & the new boy, Primrose Avenue, Yesteryear. by ==Doylum |
5-Feb-03/12:19 PM |
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| Re: Harry Potter and the philosophers stone by ==Doylum |
5-Feb-03/12:23 PM |
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I've not laughed this much for ages. You may have a nine, no wait, this is the best parody yet and it's not a haiku, here's a laughter filled ten!
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| Re: The Grapes of Wrath by ==Doylum |
5-Feb-03/12:25 PM |
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Not as good as Harry Potter but still worthy of a nine! Keep it up!
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5-Feb-03/12:26 PM |
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