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Slow motion

by INTRANSIT

Member since 2002 · Posted 1 Feb 2003 · 8 comments

I drove by a cozy chateau The lights glowed occupants roamed While outside the world turned as it snowed.

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[n/a] thepinkbunnyofdoom 1-Feb-03/7:28 PM Reply
Makes a good poening to a story but not much of a poem by itself. It needs more. I'll vote when you add to it.
[n/a] INTRANSIT › thepinkbunnyofdoom 2-Feb-03/7:35 PM Reply
WELL KIDS, THIS IS CALLED ASSONANCE. IF I HAD REPEATED A HARD CONSONANT SOUND LIKE A "C" OR A "K" IT WOULD HAVE BEEN CALLED ALLITERATION. YOU CAN USE THESE TWO TECHNIQUES TO HELP SET THE TONE OF YOUR POEMS. HAVE FUN!
[n/a] INTRANSIT › INTRANSIT 2-Feb-03/7:37 PM Reply
DON'T MEAN TO BE YELLING....FAULTY KIOSK.
[n/a] Ranger 1-Feb-03/11:08 PM Reply
Has a lot of potential, mr intransit. Keep going, though, I agree with the above comment, it does need a bit more.
[n/a] thepinkbunnyofdoom 2-Feb-03/4:23 AM Reply
* Opening
[7] Bachus 2-Feb-03/8:25 PM Reply
Have they named those microcosmed minature snow towns in the shake up see through glass globes yet?
[n/a] INTRANSIT › Bachus 3-Feb-03/4:44 PM Reply
No. I sent a couple of suggestions. They said they wanted more snooty type names like: Aspen and Vail.
[8] horus8 6-Feb-03/7:55 PM Reply
I'll think on this while i'm drinking a fruity beverage on the beatche nexte...