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Slow motion (Free verse) by INTRANSIT

I drove by a cozy chateau The lights glowed occupants roamed While outside the world turned as it snowed.

Ranger 1-Feb-03/11:08 PM
Has a lot of potential, mr intransit. Keep going, though, I agree with the above comment, it does need a bit more.




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