Re: The Book of Images by Dovina	1-Feb-06/1:48 AM
The meter might not work for some but it suits the tone of the poem. Also for me the truth in the first 4 lines of stanza 2 was spot on. Favourited ! well done.
regarding some deleted poem...	1-Feb-06/5:11 AM
Anyone who has seen Brando in 'last tango in paris' will appreciate this line: The moon has grown fat.. It certainly was. On a serious note this haiku has been dissected to death, do i like it? does it inspire and conjure? Yes.
regarding some deleted poem...	2-Feb-06/5:09 AM
liked voluptuous land of fields and the end line is so true it made me think you're an expert people watcher. I like the shift too in S3 into fantasy (satyrs etc) by doing this you make these larger people erotic and add an almost klimpt image to accompany your words. 'Boyish physiques' will one day be the one line where this poem wont have to be dated - urghh stick insects.
regarding some deleted poem...	6-Feb-06/6:58 AM
I think you could do one musically to Summer Holiday or Daddy's home and think the mix of Cliff Richard and extremists is top notch. As you do that I will put peace on earth on ebay with a starting price of 5 pence. Crazy stuff for a crazy world.
Re: Memoirs of a miners son by Caducus	7-Feb-06/8:24 AM
Changed line 3 to davy lamp as it makes a wheezing sound when lit and is used for mining. I think its better than heroes sword.
regarding some deleted poem...	7-Feb-06/8:25 AM
Fuck a duck this so favourited.
Re: Beauty, sleeping by Ranger	2-Mar-06/7:06 AM
I think your trying to deal with too many myths and stories in one poem and it needs line breaks, grammar, (i am one to talk on grammar) but their is something their most definitely.
Re: Blackbird & the Everlasting Dream by Ranger	2-Mar-06/7:07 AM
This one has a title to die for and the poems pretty good with a rhyme scheme that dont seem forced. Corvids are my favourite group of birds - mistaken.
Re: Blackbird & the Everlasting Dream by Ranger	2-Mar-06/7:08 AM
I too thought sonnet could be in the bag here too
Re: In response to by INTRANSIT	2-Mar-06/7:11 AM
You do have a way with words making them like a portal to the scenes you paint so well - in particular i love this line fingering trees flicking my antennae. Always something you do which adds beef to my own creative juices :-)
Re: Farm animals by INTRANSIT	2-Mar-06/7:12 AM
killer cool and the last line is top banana
Re: A HANGMAN'S MOANING by Dhanesh M Kumar	6-Mar-06/4:02 AM
Intersting concept and not badly penned.
Re: Judged by Dovina	16-Mar-06/3:40 AM
I cant help thinking the title for this should be 'Clint Eastwood Moments'. This has some quality concise images in the first stanza but s6 read like you were struggling compared to the other assured stzas
Re: Muff by Stephen Robins	21-Mar-06/2:53 AM
Fucking disgusting but i'm guilty of laughing.
Re: Perils of the Learning Curve by Dovina	21-Mar-06/4:56 AM
good to see a poem with an off kilter rhyme. I do it sometimes and it gets some peoples backs up but i like the modern age hippocrates goes philosophical thing.
Re: Mid-July by Ranger	21-Mar-06/4:59 AM
like citadels of steel and gore and much of the imagery you use in here is well thought out and written. The longer lines disrupt the flow compared to the concise images preceding and folowing them so work on that and you have yourself a belter here. One of the best from you me thinks :-)
Re: Dashboard Jesus by wilco	21-Mar-06/5:00 AM
bloody good poem - i love it. the title is wicked too. favourited !
Re: Squalid by Caducus	22-Mar-06/8:07 AM
comments deleted as it was a totally different poem to the one above. yawn
Re: The Right Call by Dovina	22-Mar-06/8:10 AM
you always find an apt and fittin gend to your work and i like that style about you. I think the repetition of *the* hurts the poem though
Re: Indianapolis Since by matt door	24-Mar-06/1:22 AM
wide eyed field is a good line giving possibilities of the sun being the eye or blooms. The sentiment is nice but you should learn to curb sarcasm and disrespectful digs because it gives you a superioeity complex that will not win you respect on here.