regarding some deleted poem...	13-Feb-03/1:16 AM
raping your face must stand as one of the most cutting lines I have read, for that I applaud you, however this is more of a rant than a poem, a good rant but bad poem heres my vote for your rant ..7
regarding some deleted poem...	13-Feb-03/1:18 AM
One always has the impression that when people type in block capitals and use profanity that they dribble whilst typing there anger.
Re: There by marvelis	13-Feb-03/2:23 AM
this blows hot and cold its half good, I could not imagine a song out of this until it was reduxed and the outline was clearer and easier to connect with, kinda leaves no impression on you as it is -5-
regarding some deleted poem...	13-Feb-03/3:46 AM
Another version still like it but would say the original punched more. The tree line could be as pioneering as the confederate grey sky think about alternatives you know you can do it.
Re: Instructions to a Sculptor by Christof	13-Feb-03/4:15 AM
Thought it was about time i commented on this. its all been said by the others your a great poet, a fine poem, what i like is how you used the subject an amplified such beauty from it...10
Re: Just Your Average 'Death' Poem by Owner of the Sky	13-Feb-03/6:08 AM
Moving and quite thought provoking, a strong opening and ending, probably the best i've read of yours....8
Re: staring by moonlight_sky	13-Feb-03/6:11 AM
A good subject which you could have written about better, it would be interesting to read it from the POV of the starer, black gloves, menacem so much more to touch on. This is a bit too obvious try delving deeper(5)
Re: The Boys and Girls Club of London by OneFingerAnswer	13-Feb-03/6:12 AM
A lot to take in here looks promising on a glance will peruse later
Re: The Cheetah (dedicated to zzinnia) by Mr Pig	13-Feb-03/8:58 AM
Show your nobility Mr Pig you are stressing ZZinnia out, tell her who you are, she is not your pink little muppet, why the dedication?
Re: The Cheetah (dedicated to zzinnia) by Mr Pig	13-Feb-03/10:57 AM
Heres a 9 its pretty good yo, but tell me, did you eat all the pies? is that why your a spit roaster?
Re: Xmas gifts list by lunar	14-Feb-03/8:34 AM
This is a great piece of writing though it could be argued that its not conformist to poetry, thats why I like it, and the message here. Listen, ignore poetandknowitall he loves to criticize and hates to praise, some us are trying to drag poetry into to the 21st century he's in tights and pants reading anglo saxon poetry, fuck it, keep your individuality, ---9
Re: Unmasking Wyverns by horus8	16-Feb-03/3:11 AM
A Vilanelle in the top 15, the only one congrats amigo. Loved the last stanza in particular dance with this fat lady.......8
Re: Death Of Day ( re-edit) by Mr Pig	16-Feb-03/4:06 AM
awesome, I got no beef sorry pork with this at all. 10
Re: For my wife by INTRANSIT	18-Feb-03/12:52 AM
Silverstem hit it, it is dreamy and enchanted, so glad you used saturn and not Uranus - beautifully done -9-
Re: To Laugh Or Cry by casey	18-Feb-03/12:56 AM
I think you could have told this better avoiding the cliches, you've written a lot without saying much, try and evoke more depth to your work. -4-
Re: Perversions 6: Judgement Day by razorgrin	19-Feb-03/6:36 AM
Very good
Re: The lyric of the cabbage by Dostoyevsky	19-Feb-03/9:47 AM
I couldn't have written this love poem for a cabbage, well done I bet you were knackered after. Its not something i can offer contructive criticism on (as you begged for in the suggestions page) as its non serious. However you found originality with this so.....8 By the way you have had more comments from people from what you have commented on
Re: wandering, north by <~>	20-Feb-03/5:05 AM
This is so thoughtful in both respects. Thank you I will cherish it dearly. I loved this : And I am alone And I am without I am within My own fertile doubts Fighting these feelings Fighting my pride Fighting the faith That I let slide -----you turned my blood warm all over.......xxxx cad
Re: Crucifixion by Mr Pig	23-Feb-03/3:50 AM
Loved the trilogy pig dude
Re: On coming across a field of deer one afternoon by <~>	27-Feb-03/2:07 AM
Beauty as ever my dear friend.