Re: a comment on I Hope by BrandonW	7-Oct-07/8:09 PM
i sometimes find it hard to deviate from writing the 100% spot-on factual truth about some events.. hell, even for the sake of the piece.. this just being another example of that.. coming to the end of my thoughts all i could do was let it be and hope that there was some truth in what i was saying.. i hope
Re: For Gillian Park by Caducus	24-Dec-05/8:52 AM
fuckin' great if you ask me!
Re: a comment on I Remember Thinking by BrandonW	14-Dec-05/10:01 PM
Well, its all pretty much straight forward.. I don't see how you got lost.. But anyways, those lines are just random thoughts that 'I remebered thinking'.. I don't feel I need then to convey the message.. maybe I'll think about keeping only what is needed.
Re: Thespian by BrandonW	5-Dec-05/9:46 PM
If the haiku form limits the story... what about 4 of them?
Re: a comment on Shoebox Thoughts by BrandonW	5-Dec-05/9:12 PM
I think "quaintly demented" is a nice way to put it.. I hate that no one likes haikus! I don't know if it's just lack of talent or laziness.. but I write tons of the damn things!
Re: a comment on Shoebox Thoughts by BrandonW	4-Dec-05/9:45 PM
That kinda has 18 syllables....
Re: a comment on A Joining Of Souls (edit) by Caducus	2-Dec-05/7:27 PM
I agree...
Re: Thunder by dooley	1-Dec-05/3:00 PM
Can someone please explain to me why this is good?
Re: a comment on Chills by BrandonW	1-Dec-05/2:54 PM
Yeah.. I don't usually like to write about drugs.. religon is hard get away from.. guess it's a Southern thing.. heh, I've actually been waiting for a reason to use 'insufflation' in a poem. I thought it worked well.. thanks
Re: a comment on Chills by BrandonW	1-Dec-05/2:50 PM
I should have known.. it was the one line I wasn't sure about and the one line I settled on.. I'm sure I could come up with a better line.. I was just anxious to post it.. next time I'll know better
Re: On The First Night by OneFingerAnswer	30-Nov-05/10:27 PM
Fuck.. I like it.. its sweet.. and I like it -9
Re: The Bus by Dovina	30-Nov-05/8:57 PM
I like the idea.. I get images of molecular hitchhikers riding a comet to earth.. then.. I don't know that I like bred, sped, bled, fed.. and.. in saying, "All the children know the ancient honored bus", are you saying that everyone has their own explanation for why we are here? Anyways, I think the last 3 are the strongest.. -7
Re: Virtue and Sin by dooley	30-Nov-05/8:38 PM
I'm confused.. there is "I".. and there is the girl.. there is "I" again.. then a writer, low men, a snake, and raccoon.. then back to the girl and another guy, who apparently is a knight.. then back to the damn snake..
Re: Low by wilco	30-Nov-05/6:43 PM
Do you have any music or chords worked out for this? I put some chords to it.. and it doesnt sound bad.. - 7
Re: listen by elderking	30-Nov-05/6:33 PM
8 - I likes...
Re: a comment on Picking Up Sins by BrandonW	30-Nov-05/2:35 PM
I like the fact that he not unly used cock, but that he referred to it as his "ready cock"... now theres a difference! It was ready for something!
Re: a comment on Picking Up Sins by BrandonW	29-Nov-05/6:01 PM
<blushes>
Re: a comment on Games by BrandonW	29-Nov-05/3:13 PM
Hah, I'd never edited a poem before. I had no clue....
Re: a comment on Silent Night by Dovina	29-Nov-05/3:08 PM
Led around by his what?
Re: a comment on Picking Up Sins by BrandonW	29-Nov-05/1:41 PM
I'm done with the flirting for now.. But it got me a 9! I see how this place works! Thanks..