Re: a comment on Games by BrandonW	29-Nov-05/7:13 AM
I believe WordPad.. but then again that was years ago.. I just decided that it needed a title after this long.. I didn't want to delete it. A reminder to the way I used to write.
Re: a comment on Picking Up Sins by BrandonW	29-Nov-05/7:00 AM
Gay is fine, I was shooting for more along the lines of "insecure redneck". Ya know, the kind who'd have a swinging contest with some faceless/nameless person. The kind who has to justify anything by his "cock size". The kind who worries another face is responsible for the warmth between her legs. But like I said, gay is fine. <winks>
Re: Frenulum by BrandonW	16-Nov-05/11:15 PM
The one on the bottom of my tongue is always raw or sore the next day because it rubs against my bottom teeth so much.
Re: a comment on Frenulum by BrandonW	16-Nov-05/11:13 PM
"A frenulum (or frenum) is a small fold of tissue that prevents an organ in the body from moving too far. There are frenula at several points of the body, including several in the mouth (frenulum linguae, f. labii superioris, f. labii inferioris of the tongue, upper and lower lips respectively), some in the digestive tract, and some connected to the external genitalia. In the female these include the frenulum clitoridis of the clitoris and the frenulum labiorum pudendi (aka. fourchette) where the labia minora meet at the back. The word frenulum on its own is often used for the frenulum preputii penis, which is an elastic band of tissue under the glans penis that connects to the prepuce and helps contract the prepuce over the glans. It is often partially or totally removed during circumcision. When short or tight it may prevent normal retraction and inhibit normal sexual activity."
Re: a comment on Us Sinners by BrandonW	16-Nov-05/3:31 PM
Umm.. its not that literal I don't guess.. My girlfriend of two years and I split up, she was religous. I was not.
Re: a comment on Scarlet by BrandonW	6-Nov-05/8:35 PM
Its been my experiEnce that awkward little redhead boys are great lays too! FYI
Re: a comment on Scarlet by BrandonW	6-Nov-05/12:33 PM
<shrugs> I'm barely sober enough to remember.. Oh, how I jest!
Re: a comment on The Bed I Made by BrandonW	4-Nov-05/2:16 PM
You're probably right about the question mark! This is actually a song I wrote and for the sake of posting, I killed the repeating chorus which is actually the 3rd stanza. I think that the last stanza gives it a sense of finality. Am C G e|----0---3---0----|----0-----------|---------------------- B|-1---------------|-0------3---1---|-0-----1---0---0------ G|--2---2---2---2--|--0---0---0---0-|--0------0---0---0---- D|---2---2---2---2-|---2---2---2---2|---0h2----2---0---0--- A|-0---0---0---0---|-3---3---3---3--|---------------------- E|-----------------|----------------|-3------3---3---3----- This is the basic pattern, you only play the G fill to lead to the chorus while singing "Everything reminds me of your.." Then right back to the basic repeated pattern.
Re: I want to sleep by butterflymist	9-Mar-04/1:33 PM
If there was a general direction in which the poem was supposed to be flowing, I could not find it. I'd like to see it rewritten in a less drousy state.
Re: The Cessation of Fidelity by wilco	9-Mar-04/11:30 AM
Oh, how we can all say the same thing in so many ways - been there - love it!
Re: *-UNTITLED*- by ga_writer	9-Mar-04/11:24 AM
Take that same idea, that same general message.. and try and completely rewrite it. Try and make it sound more natural, dont worry so much about your rhyme. I dont think its doing you any justice.
Re: My Wonderful by ga_writer	9-Mar-04/11:21 AM
I am all about simplicity, but c'mon! Try reaching out from the ordinary rhyme scheme, and try being creative in your use of symbolism, simile, and methaphors! You dont want me to leave a vote.. keep writing, keep posting
Re: a comment on Was it Me?? by ga_writer	7-Mar-04/10:49 PM
I know the general feeling I think your trying to convey with this poem, and maybe the inspiration for the other ones. I think your poems are decent, they have potential though.. Maybe think of revising. Its good to see other Ga writers though.. - 5
Re: a comment on Terrors Children by BrandonW	7-Mar-04/10:38 PM
This is definately a step in another direction for me. I write of my experiences, and what I know. Though the other day I watched a show entitled, Terror's Children on the Discovery Times Channel. And I just so happened to write down this poem immediately afterwards. I know nothing of being an unwanted Afghani immigrant. You are absolutely right, this poem was very simple with no emphasis on one particular thing. This was just my simple interpretation of what I had just seen. You can check it out here: http://times.discovery.com/convergence/terrorism/tunein/tunein_tch.html By the way, Thanks
Re: a comment on I Remember Thinking by BrandonW	2-Mar-04/7:56 PM
Thank you! That means alot from you..
Re: a comment on Opposites by BrandonW	26-Feb-04/8:24 PM
Well, if mediocre is somewhere in the middle... Then somewhere just a little left of the middle is my best guess.
Re: a comment on Opposites by BrandonW	26-Feb-04/8:22 PM
Its a good thing I had you for a whole two lines, <smirks> heh. Ugh, what would you suggest? This life I call my thing? Post script, copacetic is fo' shizzle dizzle!
Re: a comment on Monogamy by BrandonW	21-Feb-04/2:42 PM
No, Monogamy.. Or the inability to be monogamous.. and the guilt that follows, the lie you create to forget and deny it, and not being able to face yourself.
Re: a comment on The Couch by BrandonW	16-Feb-04/3:27 PM
Thank you much..
Re: inside me by cherish	11-Jan-03/8:15 PM
Damnit.. hoping for filth also