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Member since 2004 · Posted 9 Mar 2004 · 4 comments

I never had a dream in my life Until I looked up, into your eyes My heart had been so worn You knew it was torn You still took me in For our lives to begin Iâve never felt so safe Until I look at your face I know now, what I was missing Your love, it is such a blessing My life is now complete with you My heart, for you, will always be true

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[n/a] BrandonW 9-Mar-04/11:24 AM Reply

Take that same idea, that same general message.. and try and completely rewrite it. Try and make it sound more natural, dont worry so much about your rhyme. I dont think its doing you any justice.

[n/a] ga_writer › BrandonW 9-Mar-04/2:29 PM Reply

i don't get what you're trying to say.. i don't take 12 weeks to write anything. i just write what comes to me. i guess there's always room for improvement

[7] butterflymist 9-Mar-04/1:15 PM Reply

brandon w is right it is way to juvenile not that it sucks it is very goooooooooood but it needs to flow

[n/a] ga_writer › butterflymist 9-Mar-04/2:27 PM Reply

i don't understand what u mean?? i'll take all the help i can get