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*-UNTITLED*- (Free verse) by ga_writer

I never had a dream in my life Until I looked up, into your eyes My heart had been so worn You knew it was torn You still took me in For our lives to begin I’ve never felt so safe Until I look at your face I know now, what I was missing Your love, it is such a blessing My life is now complete with you My heart, for you, will always be true

BrandonW 9-Mar-04/11:24 AM
Take that same idea, that same general message.. and try and completely rewrite it. Try and make it sound more natural, dont worry so much about your rhyme. I dont think its doing you any justice.




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