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Was it Me?? (Free verse) by ga_writer
How could you do what you did today? You said your love was here, it would never go away. I thought the both of us would last, Until these heartbreaks of mine were cast. When I looked into your eyes, my life had meaning, Now, inside, It’s like I have no feeling. My heart was yours for so long, I don’t know now how I can go on. You were my angel sent from above, Sent here for me to shower you with my love. I will love you my whole life and beyond, What I feel for you now, it is so strong. There is something I need to know before I leave, Was it me?

Up the ladder: Cassandra.
Down the ladder: Thankless

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Arithmetic Mean: 7.0
Weighted score: 5.537883
Overall Rank: 2616
Posted: March 7, 2004 8:18 PM PST; Last modified: March 7, 2004 8:18 PM PST
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[n/a] ga_writer @ 162.40.239.14 | 7-Mar-04/8:20 PM | Reply
I wrote this peom when me and my ex-girl-friend broke up. She went one way to college and i went the other way. Enjoy!!! ~Nathan
[5] BrandonW @ 172.166.177.176 > ga_writer | 7-Mar-04/10:49 PM | Reply
I know the general feeling I think your trying to convey with this poem, and maybe the inspiration for the other ones. I think your poems are decent, they have potential though.. Maybe think of revising. Its good to see other Ga writers though.. - 5
[n/a] ga_writer @ 162.40.229.196 > BrandonW | 8-Mar-04/6:07 PM | Reply
Thank you for the comment.. how can i revise it. I really want to know.. i'm a beginner.. i just write.. i really never thought about of putting it on the web.. thanx for what u said though!! all help is wanted!! ~NaTe
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