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Games (Free verse) by BrandonW
I've said the games you play Well they are getting old And the once warm feelings They have long been cold But you get out your jacket And your playing clothes What goes on inside your mind No one really knows If there is a solution To the problems that we face Then why is it that the problem Is the only thing I taste What held us together Is ripping us apart And slowly tearing from my chest The game you called my heart

Down the ladder: Drowning in Me

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Arithmetic Mean: 5.8
Weighted score: 5.095362
Overall Rank: 6079
Posted: December 31, 2002 1:13 PM PST; Last modified: November 28, 2005 9:39 PM PST
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[10] Another Bobjim?!?! @ 81.132.42.59 | 31-Dec-02/9:18 PM | Reply
Ouch.
[10] ALChemy @ 24.74.101.159 | 28-Nov-05/9:48 PM | Reply
Wrote this in MS Word huh?
[8] zodiac @ 217.144.7.195 > ALChemy | 29-Nov-05/2:31 AM | Reply
I've been reading a poetry anthology edited by Billy Collins where he (Billy) capitalizes the first words of lines I know weren't capitalized in their originals. It is a little off-putting. Seems like most poets I read do capitalize occasional poems, but nowhere near consistently. I think it's mainly a problem for people who aren't used to reading through enjambment.
[10] ALChemy @ 24.74.101.159 > zodiac | 29-Nov-05/2:50 AM | Reply
Most Windows operating systems come with MS word and unless you change it's settings it will capitalize the first letter of every line. I like to give people the benefit of the doubt.

Have you read "Niether Snow"? I like it. It reminds me of driving in Pennsylvania.
[8] zodiac @ 217.144.7.195 > ALChemy | 29-Nov-05/3:05 AM | Reply
Not bad. Billy Collins isn't awful, but didn't deserve to be US Poet Laureate. I imagine some educated people made a big list of poets who hadn't criticized the war yet, and W just picked the one from Texas.
[10] ALChemy @ 24.74.101.159 > zodiac | 29-Nov-05/3:35 AM | Reply
See I thought it was just 'cause he was Irish, or is it Scottish. Ahh hell, what's the difference.
[n/a] BrandonW @ 216.78.48.155 > ALChemy | 29-Nov-05/7:13 AM | Reply
I believe WordPad.. but then again that was years ago.. I just decided that it needed a title after this long.. I didn't want to delete it. A reminder to the way I used to write.
[10] ALChemy @ 24.74.101.159 > BrandonW | 29-Nov-05/12:30 PM | Reply
So that's why you pushed other peoples poems down the recent posts list. That's sweet of you.
[n/a] BrandonW @ 216.78.56.221 > ALChemy | 29-Nov-05/3:13 PM | Reply
Hah, I'd never edited a poem before. I had no clue....
[10] ALChemy @ 24.74.101.159 > BrandonW | 29-Nov-05/3:26 PM | Reply
So now you know. "And knowing is half the battle. Yooooo Joe!"
[8] zodiac @ 212.118.19.91 | 30-Nov-05/1:27 AM | Reply
Vague. Get some details in there. Who, what, where and when, for starters. Unless you're Chris Isaak - in which case, not bad for you.
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