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Games (Free verse) by BrandonW I've said the games you play
Well they are getting old
And the once warm feelings
They have long been cold
But you get out your jacket
And your playing clothes
What goes on inside your mind
No one really knows
If there is a solution
To the problems that we face
Then why is it that the problem
Is the only thing I taste
What held us together
Is ripping us apart
And slowly tearing from my chest
The game you called my heart
Up the ladder:
(Rough Draft) The Adventures of Zoot and Corky
Down the ladder:
Drowning in Me
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Posted: December 31, 2002 1:13 PM PST; Last modified: November 28, 2005 9:39 PM PSTWeighted score: 5.095362 Overall Rank: 6081 Comments:
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Another Bobjim?!?! @ 81.132.42.59
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31-Dec-02/9:18 PM
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Ouch.
Wrote this in MS Word huh?
I've been reading a poetry anthology edited by Billy Collins where he (Billy) capitalizes the first words of lines I know weren't capitalized in their originals. It is a little off-putting. Seems like most poets I read do capitalize occasional poems, but nowhere near consistently. I think it's mainly a problem for people who aren't used to reading through enjambment.
Most Windows operating systems come with MS word and unless you change it's settings it will capitalize the first letter of every line. I like to give people the benefit of the doubt.
Have you read "Niether Snow"? I like it. It reminds me of driving in Pennsylvania.
Not bad. Billy Collins isn't awful, but didn't deserve to be US Poet Laureate. I imagine some educated people made a big list of poets who hadn't criticized the war yet, and W just picked the one from Texas.
See I thought it was just 'cause he was Irish, or is it Scottish. Ahh hell, what's the difference.
I believe WordPad.. but then again that was years ago.. I just decided that it needed a title after this long.. I didn't want to delete it. A reminder to the way I used to write.
So that's why you pushed other peoples poems down the recent posts list. That's sweet of you.
Hah, I'd never edited a poem before. I had no clue....
So now you know. "And knowing is half the battle. Yooooo Joe!"
Vague. Get some details in there. Who, what, where and when, for starters. Unless you're Chris Isaak - in which case, not bad for you.
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