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Games (Free verse) by BrandonW

I've said the games you play Well they are getting old And the once warm feelings They have long been cold But you get out your jacket And your playing clothes What goes on inside your mind No one really knows If there is a solution To the problems that we face Then why is it that the problem Is the only thing I taste What held us together Is ripping us apart And slowly tearing from my chest The game you called my heart

zodiac 30-Nov-05/1:27 AM
Vague. Get some details in there. Who, what, where and when, for starters. Unless you're Chris Isaak - in which case, not bad for you.




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