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My Wonderful (Free verse) by ga_writer Baby, I love you, you know I do
The day you became mine, my life grew
I could not make it without you
Without all of the love you give, I wouldnât know what to do
You are truly the man of my dreams
I wish I could show you how much that means
The love I have for you runs so deep
Forever, in my heart, is where Iâll always keep
I will love you until the day I die
Until the entire ocean water reaches the sky
My life is nothing with out your wonderful love
You are my beautiful angel sent to me from above
I LOVE YOU ALWAYS!!!
Up the ladder:
knocked down to look up
Down the ladder:
peanut butter sandwiches on a hot summer day
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Posted: March 9, 2004 10:28 AM PST; Last modified: March 9, 2004 10:28 AM PSTWeighted score: 5.0 Overall Rank: 7974 Comments:
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BrandonW @ 172.201.249.41
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9-Mar-04/11:21 AM
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I am all about simplicity, but c'mon! Try reaching out from the ordinary rhyme scheme, and try being creative in your use of symbolism, simile, and methaphors! You dont want me to leave a vote.. keep writing, keep posting
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