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My Wonderful (Free verse) by ga_writer

Baby, I love you, you know I do The day you became mine, my life grew I could not make it without you Without all of the love you give, I wouldn’t know what to do You are truly the man of my dreams I wish I could show you how much that means The love I have for you runs so deep Forever, in my heart, is where I’ll always keep I will love you until the day I die Until the entire ocean water reaches the sky My life is nothing with out your wonderful love You are my beautiful angel sent to me from above I LOVE YOU ALWAYS!!!

BrandonW 9-Mar-04/11:21 AM
I am all about simplicity, but c'mon! Try reaching out from the ordinary rhyme scheme, and try being creative in your use of symbolism, simile, and methaphors! You dont want me to leave a vote.. keep writing, keep posting




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