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Silent Night (Free verse) by Dovina Silent night
Wholly night
Little calm
Little right
Neither virgin
Mother nor child
Wholly fragile
Vibrant and wild
Sleep in his heavenly peace
Sleep 'round his heavenly piece
Up the ladder:
The taste of something new.
Down the ladder:
my read of love
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Posted: November 28, 2005 11:16 AM PST; Last modified: November 28, 2005 11:16 AM PSTWeighted score: 4.8211956 Overall Rank: 10873 Comments:
A ream look at a fast pull, and no slang. You could have done this a lot faster by simply adding the word "not" to the beginning of each line. And it would have been just as clever.
But then it couldn't be sung to the traditional melody without forcing the rhythm. And it wouldn't make sense. Your answer: "It doesn't anyway." My answer: "Yes it does."
Nighty-eight bottles of beer on the wall.
Sure it makes sense. It's just not clever.
AlChemy: Do you know these?
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I guess under that metaphor I could say I have Irritable bowel syndrome. Few can match him turd for turd. You came as close as anyone.
Well, you have to know that I wrote 90% of "Beard My Homemade Negro Jesus", the most epic poem on poemranker ever.
Correction: 50%.
Your comment got lost in the rankersphere. Sorry.
I haven't been accused of being -=Dark_Angel=-, mostly because everybody who cares knows he's given me more hell than anybody else, except maybe -=Dark_Angel=-part2. I have been accused on poemranker of being a "suck-egg dog", a "dolly-mop", and "a hopeless Gay introvert," but the worst was when Dovina accused me of having expectations.
I think the only person I thought you might be once was Hap. (or maybe the ghost of John Updike).
Isn't he still alive?
Dark Angel can't die he's too clever for that.
Maybe. I forgot to check. He's so old. Like Bob Hope before he died, every year I'd just assume he died.
The best thing about John Updike is the Krusty the Klown line, "Shut up, Updike." My wife tells me that's her new SMS ring.
The second is that in two years of claiming to be John Updike on poemranker, only about three users have known he's a real person.
The third and fourth are "John Dickup" and "Joan Bigdyke".
Is that line a quote or one of your inventions? Should be a quote.
I'm quoting my own imaginary detractors. As usual.
Thinking outside the box again.
And you're saying you're not any of those things?
Someone on here once said I don't have any feelings....that hurt.
Yeah, I made up all those insults, so I guess I should know.
If it was me, I'm sorry.
If his piece was so heavenly would your night be so silent>?
Silence is golden.
I'm not religious or anything but I just don't think turning a christmas carol into a naughty nursery rhyme is all that original. No offense, but it just doesn't seem any more so to me that Sasha's irritating translations.
I dont know how you pulled it off, but...
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"Wholly night" as in completely night is a weak line.
Even Dan Brown would be walking on eggshells around this one. Your showing some guts and that gets you a "You go girl" from me.
I donât think St. Peter will be impressed with the prosecutionâs argument. We are made that way by his Master, and heâd have to explain why this case is sin.
Your âeggshellsâ comment appears based on the idea that I took a sacred carol and made it vulgar. But think about the words of that song and tell me if you think they should be sacred.
I hear St. peter and the others in heaven don't take to kindly to blasphemy.
You can make them sacred for yourself but I'd prefer to follow a prophet who's not lead around by his cock.
Profane: Vulgar; coarse
DOVINA: "I'm trying to say that I don't think it's blasphemy."
I wasn't offended. I just thought it was offensive and the other replies prove me right.
Siren night
Whorey night
All is cum
Ow his bite
Ram yo' vagina
Muffer in China
Whorey inferno
Nintento and my ho
Sheep in heavin' repeat
Sheep in heavin' repeat.
I think itâs probably just a compensation thing. Like how blind peopleâs senses become more highly tuned. I'm not sure why rhythm would be such an important mechanism for dyslexics but it seems to be that way.