Help | About | Suggestions | Alms | Chat [0] | Users [0] | Log In | Join
 Search:
Poem: Submit | Random | Best | Worst | Recent | Comments   

The Occasional Love (Free verse) by SomeNewKill
Standing shallow in this figment of sleep, In and out of perspective of her knee deep. This evanesce fossit, I washed my face in the same place that we lost it. Not a clear reflection, to help reveal the calm of introspection. We bathed in our own naivet'e, and were cleansed of true simplicity. The sounds made under running water supressed, from the moment you were vunerable, to the occasions she was dressed. To this unconditional surrender, she laid faultless,I'll be tender. Like plain sailing through these sheets, A vessel cozy in defeat. Darkness to some degree. Undercover. Your just a lover. Don't breath a word. It's just a shade of me. I have this predilection for you, And I wouldnt have it if I wasnt in love, Adornment and sleeping through, Downcasts of my eyes that drug, Her along this raining pity walk, But I dont want you to fall behind, It just seems to be a necessity, But is so futile when I cant talk, About what makes me this way, So attempting everyday, Endearingly you stick around, And for that Ive found, That I love her. Through this walk in the rain, Solemnly I remain.

Up the ladder: Dovina & Co
Down the ladder: ex

You must be logged in to leave comments. Vote:

Votes: (green: user, blue: anonymous)
 GraphVotes
10  .. 01
.. 00
.. 00
.. 00
.. 00
.. 00
.. 00
.. 00
.. 20
.. 00
.. 10

Arithmetic Mean: 3.5
Weighted score: 4.8211956
Overall Rank: 10880
Posted: July 28, 2007 10:10 PM PDT; Last modified: July 28, 2007 10:10 PM PDT
View voting details
Comments:
[2] SupremeDreamer @ 192.220.136.191 | 3-Aug-07/12:46 PM | Reply
breath = breathe? Also, this whole thing is confused. Many aspects of this poem reminds me of pimples. Though slightly more matured than the average pimple, it still possesses puss.

Blessed with a two.
142 view(s)




Track and Plan your submissions ; Read some Comics ; Get Paid for your Poetry
PoemRanker Copyright © 2001 - 2024 - kaolin fire - All Rights Reserved
All poems Copyright © their respective authors
An internet tradition since June 9, 2001