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Silent Night (Free verse) by Dovina

Silent night Wholly night Little calm Little right Neither virgin Mother nor child Wholly fragile Vibrant and wild Sleep in his heavenly peace Sleep 'round his heavenly piece

ALChemy 28-Nov-05/9:11 PM
Your honor, St. Peter. I bring you exhibit A: Silent Night by Dovina. The prosecution now rests it's case.

"Wholly night" as in completely night is a weak line.
Even Dan Brown would be walking on eggshells around this one. Your showing some guts and that gets you a "You go girl" from me.




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