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The Bus (Free verse) by Dovina
A bus drove in to vacant land millennia ago so wise men say unloaded folks sped away left skidmarks in the sand The dumped-out strangers bred and spread til earth they filled and bled just to get them fed All the children know the ancient honored bus learned in pew or studied in a chair because without a ride their people never came and they but bits of clay Some say they know the driver read his promise never to forsake Others say the bus maneuvered on its own a mathematic kind of tram But none of them for all their understanding even knows the grass

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Arithmetic Mean: 6.2
Weighted score: 5.1430435
Overall Rank: 5385
Posted: November 30, 2005 8:33 PM PST; Last modified: November 30, 2005 8:33 PM PST
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[7] BrandonW @ 216.78.53.191 | 30-Nov-05/8:57 PM | Reply
I like the idea.. I get images of molecular hitchhikers riding a comet to earth.. then.. I don't know that I like bred, sped, bled, fed.. and.. in saying, "All the children know the ancient honored bus", are you saying that everyone has their own explanation for why we are here? Anyways, I think the last 3 are the strongest.. -7
[n/a] Dovina @ 69.175.32.104 > BrandonW | 2-Dec-05/12:29 PM | Reply
Yeah, you've got the general idea.
[7] zodiac @ 217.144.7.195 | 1-Dec-05/9:06 AM | Reply
This is the exact plot of Douglas Adams' "The Restaurant at the End of the Universe" minus such wackiness as when Arthur tries to get a bag of Scrabble letters to randomly spell The Ultimate Question and they spell "What do you get when you multiply six by nine".

In other words, not unclever, but cleverer the first time.
[9] ALChemy @ 24.74.101.159 > zodiac | 1-Dec-05/10:26 AM | Reply
There was a popular saying we had in art school. "You can't copyright an idea."

I give you a -9- Dovina for thinking like an Indian.
[n/a] Dovina @ 69.175.32.104 > ALChemy | 2-Dec-05/12:31 PM | Reply
Purely by chance do I think like an Indian. I'm sure it's not a bad way to think, but frankly I don't know how to think like that.
[9] ALChemy @ 24.74.101.159 > Dovina | 2-Dec-05/2:44 PM | Reply
I'm sure that's the case with indians too.
[n/a] Dovina @ 69.175.32.104 > zodiac | 2-Dec-05/12:27 PM | Reply
In the final throws of "Hitchhiker's Guide to the Universe," God finally gives the answer: "Sorry to have bothered you" It's not exactly the same plot, but I'm asking some of the same questions.
[7] zodiac @ 217.144.7.195 > Dovina | 2-Dec-05/1:05 PM | Reply
It's not just asking the same questions. It's having clueless sophisticated people arrive on Earth by some spacey public-transport and make a muddle of all EArth's wholesome goodness.
[8] wilco @ 24.92.74.122 | 1-Dec-05/2:51 PM | Reply
aw naw, hush that fuss. Everybody move to the back of the bus.

I really thought this was going to be about Rosa Parks or Jerome Bettis....anyway, not bad.
[7] zodiac @ 212.38.134.51 | 5-Dec-05/3:53 AM | Reply
I can't believe you sevened my Christmas poem, which, incidentally, beats the pants off yours. Is it because I sevened this? Fie!
[n/a] Dovina @ 209.247.222.99 > zodiac | 5-Dec-05/5:35 PM | Reply
I do many evil acts, but retaliatioin voting is not one.
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