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listen (Free verse) by elderking unacknowledged
my words hover,
ever hopeful,
until
shamed at last
by your silence
they scatter
crowding somber shadows
in anxious disarray.
Up the ladder:
fireflies die too
Down the ladder:
Mad
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Posted: November 25, 2005 10:01 PM PST; Last modified: November 25, 2005 10:01 PM PSTWeighted score: 5.0715218 Overall Rank: 6594 Comments:
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ALChemy @ 24.74.101.159
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26-Nov-05/12:30 AM
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Good.
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elderking @ 209.79.199.40
> ALChemy
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26-Nov-05/1:52 PM
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Thanks!
It seems a complicasted way of saying she ignores you.
You go girl.
Okay, I'll take that little pipi trip I've been planning for the last hour.
I figured if I was wordy enough, he might "hear" what I was saying. I figured out after awhile he was pretty much "deaf".
Thanks for the comment.
True enough! Thanks.
The last line's good; the first 8 don't make words do anything they haven't done for six hundred years at least.
8 - I likes...
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