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listen (Free verse) by elderking

unacknowledged my words hover, ever hopeful, until shamed at last by your silence they scatter crowding somber shadows in anxious disarray.

zodiac 27-Nov-05/6:07 AM
The last line's good; the first 8 don't make words do anything they haven't done for six hundred years at least.




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