Re: Recognition by nentwined	15-Jan-07/7:48 PM
I liked this a lot! Could see an easy progression type poem- next stanza: Benefiting two..
Re: knowledge building on knowledge by nentwined	15-Jan-07/7:49 PM
doesn't do it for me-
Re: standing outside the door by nentwined	15-Jan-07/7:51 PM
The "don't bug me" I take it refers to the other person waiting to get into the bathroom, named in the title-
Re: Censor by nentwined	15-Jan-07/7:53 PM
So the censor is XXXing all those thoughts or lines- like pee filtered in your body by the liver- still not a great poem, though I guess I understood it-
Re: dit da haiku by nentwined	15-Jan-07/7:57 PM
someone had to write it!
Re: on my hog by nentwined	15-Jan-07/7:59 PM
I got it. Not great stuff, though.
Re: word splatter by nentwined	15-Jan-07/8:00 PM
feels very real.
Re: a love not meant to be by nentwined	15-Jan-07/8:02 PM
has some charm
Re: The cat who would fly by nentwined	15-Jan-07/8:05 PM
parts too unclear, i liked the last 3 lines- with paper of my face- don't use a metaphor if you won't develop it or DId you mean Off my face, as Dovina asked--
Re: fox and hounds by nentwined	15-Jan-07/8:07 PM
doesn't make it for me- some nice images, but did not jell-
Re: Window Washer (midtown) by ecargo	15-Jan-07/8:26 PM
very lyrical
Re: Sky All Around Me (goddess edit) by ecargo	15-Jan-07/8:27 PM
Full of light and grace and airiness- lovely to read!
Re: Spinning, reeling by ecargo	15-Jan-07/8:32 PM
It's hard to make decent poetry from heart felt anger over war and politics- not a bad effort-
regarding some deleted poem...	25-Jan-07/7:25 AM
Unfortunately true.
Re: Angelic Fornication by The_Third_Isis	21-Dec-20/6:22 PM
This moved me. I felt the pain.
Re: Deja Vu by Jeremi B. Handrinos	21-Dec-20/6:26 PM
Loved some of your lines: especially "sky will keep, and the sea, it sleeps; "thoughts I thumbnailed to cork board" and "giant redwoods, so old/committed to reach, and be firm" Felt some of it (especially beginning) did not mesh with the rest, which was like a progressive story of a life. Might be better to start with second stanza, greater impact that way. Possibly?! Like your ending.
Re: Beached (Or how I learned to give up the day) by Jeremi B. Handrinos	21-Dec-20/6:30 PM
LOVED the line: "The sun had just yoked"- original and excellent! Some seemed a little lackluster: the lines"whales were sick too" and a little trite: "I saw no foot-steps home"--The first two stanzas are fresh and hardhitting. Rest of poem did not match that power.
Re: The Pig Roast by Jeremi B. Handrinos	21-Dec-20/6:32 PM
Intense. Moving. Powerful description, strong ending.
Re: From Then Till Now by Jeremi B. Handrinos	21-Dec-20/6:35 PM
Liked it! Sadly, relate to it...
Re: appropriation by nentwined	21-Dec-20/6:40 PM
lovely!