| Re: a comment on Cupid promised me, Nadine by Shardik |
15-Feb-03/4:23 AM |
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Well, it sounds a hell of a lot better than my "runes". I/P is not an easy task. Can you do it?
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| Re: Positivism and Behaviourism:They Suck by razorgrin |
13-Feb-03/5:34 PM |
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Ya fuckin' got that right driVER!
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| Re: The Blooding by Mr Pig |
12-Feb-03/8:46 AM |
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| Re: a comment on The Eskimo and the fish by INTRANSIT |
12-Feb-03/8:42 AM |
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Good call Mr. P. Iwantedd the ttone to chhange but I see the tempo changed ttoo. When I have time,, as ususal. Thank you.
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| Re: Starving at Tiffany's by horus8 |
11-Feb-03/5:56 PM |
Why by the age of 35, I've not reaad that book is beyond me!
A most excellennt poem, however.
I seeem to have deeevelopeed a stutter. To go wiht my funnny walk, of coursee..
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| Re: a comment on nightly by <~> |
10-Feb-03/5:52 PM |
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Whatever's wrong with you is no little ting.
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| Re: nightly by <~> |
10-Feb-03/6:25 AM |
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now try it in a bed that shakes noisily all night.
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| Re: nightly by <~> |
10-Feb-03/6:25 AM |
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now try it in a bed that shakes noisily all night.
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| Re: where is thy sting? by <~> |
10-Feb-03/6:23 AM |
Top o' the mornin' to ya lass! D.C. Got ugly on me Sun. Tangled with a four wheeler. No injuries though.
How I wish I could swim as I find myself drowning in your depth.
Found a possible solution to the eskimo/fish problem will post when I can. happy monday!
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| Re: a comment on What the runes said by INTRANSIT |
4-Feb-03/2:42 AM |
I was trying really hard to make it Iambic. Iwas'nt sure about the recind either, I'll try too make that bettter. whas wrong with handfull? (many) again Iambic attempt (Ihate filler words but sometimes...) (lingered) 2 syllables? I'm not home and I don't have all the ttols I need damnit. sorry water sans apostrophe is correct in this case. it belongs to the water.
So-Iambic again. sleep-metaphor for quiet. Thanks so much for your time. when I get some myself I'll see what i can do about recind. Fuck, making things smoothe to the ear is hard. It's such a rough world we dlive in eh?
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| Re: a comment on Slow motion by INTRANSIT |
3-Feb-03/4:44 PM |
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No. I sent a couple of suggestions. They said they wanted more snooty type names like: Aspen and Vail.
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| Re: a comment on One Moment to the Other (v2) by nentwined |
3-Feb-03/2:59 PM |
good thing I bought you lunch while i was there, can I have my arms back now?
O.O.T
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| Re: The Kansas City Chiefs suck by Jeremi B. Handrinos |
3-Feb-03/2:53 PM |
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| Re: a comment on Slow motion by INTRANSIT |
2-Feb-03/7:37 PM |
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DON'T MEAN TO BE YELLING....FAULTY KIOSK.
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| Re: a comment on Slow motion by INTRANSIT |
2-Feb-03/7:35 PM |
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WELL KIDS, THIS IS CALLED ASSONANCE. IF I HAD REPEATED A HARD CONSONANT SOUND LIKE A "C" OR A "K" IT WOULD HAVE BEEN CALLED ALLITERATION. YOU CAN USE THESE TWO TECHNIQUES TO HELP SET THE TONE OF YOUR POEMS. HAVE FUN!
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| Re: Run Forest! Run... by Bachus |
1-Feb-03/5:42 PM |
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Which throne are you trying to heir to? or is it air or err?
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| Re: a comment on unsent by Bill Z Bub |
1-Feb-03/5:32 PM |
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Relax, I'm insecure too. You've got nothing to mope about. So stop, it's unbecoming. Sorry about the comment, I had a fussy kiosk and I'm on the road. To be more specific, I don't like what horus does like in your poem. the steering wheel thing makes it sound hooker-ish. Ignore what I said about the daed thing. Leave it alone for a while sounds like you're trying too hard. Relax, have fun, write something silly or stupid just for a reality check.
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| Re: unsent by Bill Z Bub |
30-Jan-03/2:45 PM |
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I hate to do this to you. For some reason it feels like it's about some one who died. still has that sexy edge you want but it's carrying extra baggage.
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| Re: one moment to the other by nentwined |
27-Jan-03/9:19 AM |
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I wish you'd post more. more more MORE I SAY!
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| Re: Snowblind by horus8 |
23-Jan-03/4:27 PM |
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I hate it when that happens!
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