| Re: Child Shaped Adult by http://mulberryfairy |
1-Sep-05/7:17 PM |
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OOOOOH!!! and the sub-poem too! wow.
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1-Sep-05/7:26 PM |
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| Re: Urbane Jane by MacFrantic |
1-Sep-05/7:38 PM |
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| Re: First Love by Dovina |
2-Sep-05/12:16 PM |
Deeeeeeeee! please go for the beat and not the look.
....I wasn't winter-broken, though,
I thought that it would stay.
I hate using extra words too but the first three lines
hopscotch nicely.
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| Re: Baudelaire: The Albatross by Sasha |
2-Sep-05/12:22 PM |
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I have a chapbook of Baudelaire, Some poems from Le Fleurs Du Mal. Already translated of course. Honestly, whenever I make a comment on your poems, I feel like a dope. Completely unknowledgable. Useless. I hate that. I really do.
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| Re: The Absense of God by Bluemonkey |
2-Sep-05/12:27 PM |
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Flight 2252, 757 heavy. You are cleared for take-off runway two-seven left.
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| Re: The Scout by wilco |
3-Sep-05/6:54 AM |
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-extraneous- good word but it bugs me beat-wise. Something about l-3 and l-4 in the first don't jive.
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3-Sep-05/8:04 AM |
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| Re: Cinder Mint Disaster Garden by MacFrantic |
3-Sep-05/8:16 AM |
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I saw mental patients in a garden. I'm not kidding.
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| Re: Small-town Postal Clerk Considers Inspiration by zodiac |
6-Sep-05/5:48 AM |
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HELP! Excelsior is wood shavings?! Can't be. Makes no sense. Dic.com left me cold. ??????? It is better as one whole piece.
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| Re: Stardust by TLRufener |
6-Sep-05/9:59 AM |
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Though it still needs some work, I think you should look at this. jsp id=102847.
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| Re: Stop stalking me, eventually by T. Jonathron Remp |
6-Sep-05/10:06 AM |
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I f t h e d a m n e d s t an z a s d i d n ' t a l l s a y t h e s a m e t h i n g . . . . . . . basically.
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| Re: Stardust by TLRufener |
6-Sep-05/10:07 AM |
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And 18345 which doesn't need work. these are good examples of relatively simple rhyme that can easily ratchet up a poem.
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6-Sep-05/10:26 AM |
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Operative word: well as in- well for water. Put him in the well. tell us about his terrible scratchings to get out, how the well crumbles above him, how you want to rescue him in the "bucket of your love". Okay thats corny. But the metaphor would make a better poem.
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| Re: Horus8 & The Werewolves Live... by horus8 |
18-Sep-05/10:46 AM |
Bought your book! Went to freakin St Joseph MO to get it too. It was worth it to take the time to read instead of rushing through. My new fave? Wigging out!
Love it when justice gets served up hot from mattress dancing! I laughed so hard I had to put the book down.
When's the next one due?
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20-Sep-05/6:45 AM |
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I see i will need to invest in a book of poetry references i.e. the white butterflies. Early prep for Halloween poems?
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| Re: untitled Rubiyat 1 by starkfister |
20-Sep-05/2:10 PM |
well, at least you have a blog!
Moose.
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| Re: Light by Quarton |
21-Sep-05/9:20 AM |
I'm reading an anthology right now: Staying alive (real poems for unreal times) By Neil Astley. I remember a poem that made mention of black holes or a black hole and your poetry came to mind. I cant seem to find the poem but the whole anthology is reeeeeely good.
Um, mamm-outh? and gladfly/glowfly? Planet-fly or moon-fly could be used? don't know. 8
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| Re: Elmer's Last Try by Dovina |
21-Sep-05/8:04 PM |
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Sad. Interesting swap there. Unlike me and my heavily cliched (and sedated) poems. I think I should like to try an inversion someday. How much does the safety equipment cost? Man, the rankers dead lately!
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| Re: Gnarly Knees by Dovina |
9-Oct-05/6:14 AM |
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With knees like those, you will attract a handsome and rugged man and have many a great out-of-doors "adventures".
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