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Child Shaped Adult (Free verse) by http://mulberryfairy A child shaped adult
picks an icy beach
for ultimate treasure
Heart shaped rock
Of which sheâs collected dozens
yet her need for heart
remains
Insatiable
Returning to the car
empty-handed save
pink frostbite
Heartless
The muddy pothole
beckons
reveals to her
Heart shaped asphalt
Which she lifts
delicately
Itâs huge!
See?
As the car warms
she fondles it
removing crumbles
Groaning
She regrets
mourns
"I knew my heart would get
Broken"
Right down the middle
she laughs at the
metaphor
Unintended
Her narrow arm pumps
rolls down the window
"Throw It!"
Up the ladder:
South Shore
Down the ladder:
Unless Redux
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Posted: July 29, 2005 10:36 PM PDT; Last modified: July 29, 2005 10:36 PM PDTWeighted score: 5.119203 Overall Rank: 5770 The following users have marked this poem on their favorites list:
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LilMsLadyPoet @ 205.188.116.69
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31-Jul-05/7:07 AM
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I liked this one! Th ending was kind of unexpected and abrupt, though.
Good to see you're still at it! I miss god's wife. Don't you? This is really great, I love it.
OOOOOH!!! and the sub-poem too! wow.
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