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Free verse № 131260

Light

Member since 2002 · Posted 21 Sep 2005 · Edited 21 Sep 2005 · 4 comments

Light, on a summer night; chased by a child whose hand reaches out--captures the light. Opens her hand; the glowfly blinks, then flies away. In a far away galaxy, a giant star implodes. Like the glowfly, its light goes out; infinite density the strange result. The end of light, like the end of time. A black hole remains, incapable of flight. Child's hand closed, like gravity implied, the glowfly's freedom forever denied.

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[8] INTRANSIT 21-Sep-05/9:20 AM Reply
I'm reading an anthology right now: Staying alive (real poems for unreal times) By Neil Astley. I remember a poem that made mention of black holes or a black hole and your poetry came to mind. I cant seem to find the poem but the whole anthology is reeeeeely good.

Um, mamm-outh? and gladfly/glowfly? Planet-fly or moon-fly could be used? don't know. 8
[n/a] Quarton › INTRANSIT 21-Sep-05/9:53 AM Reply
Thanks for the read. I changed mammouth to giant and it is a glowfly, not a gladfly which I somehow bungled. Also changed explode to implode which is what a supernova does prior to becoming a black hole.
[8] Dovina 21-Sep-05/1:32 PM Reply
A good comparison.
[n/a] ALChemy 21-Sep-05/2:37 PM Reply
Like Dovina said nice metaphor.
This shows the duality between human nature and science. Science has no compassion but human nature has its moments.
Your still improving. Which is more than most of us can say.