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Light (Free verse) by Quarton
Light, on a summer night; chased by a child whose hand reaches out--captures the light. Opens her hand; the glowfly blinks, then flies away. In a far away galaxy, a giant star implodes. Like the glowfly, its light goes out; infinite density the strange result. The end of light, like the end of time. A black hole remains, incapable of flight. Child's hand closed, like gravity implied, the glowfly's freedom forever denied.

Up the ladder: Child Shaped Adult
Down the ladder: Amputation

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Arithmetic Mean: 6.0
Weighted score: 5.119203
Overall Rank: 5764
Posted: September 21, 2005 8:57 AM PDT; Last modified: September 21, 2005 9:46 AM PDT
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[8] INTRANSIT @ 205.188.116.69 | 21-Sep-05/9:20 AM | Reply
I'm reading an anthology right now: Staying alive (real poems for unreal times) By Neil Astley. I remember a poem that made mention of black holes or a black hole and your poetry came to mind. I cant seem to find the poem but the whole anthology is reeeeeely good.

Um, mamm-outh? and gladfly/glowfly? Planet-fly or moon-fly could be used? don't know. 8
[n/a] Quarton @ 12.217.202.34 > INTRANSIT | 21-Sep-05/9:53 AM | Reply
Thanks for the read. I changed mammouth to giant and it is a glowfly, not a gladfly which I somehow bungled. Also changed explode to implode which is what a supernova does prior to becoming a black hole.
[8] Dovina @ 24.58.115.77 | 21-Sep-05/1:32 PM | Reply
A good comparison.
[n/a] ALChemy @ 65.188.89.69 | 21-Sep-05/2:37 PM | Reply
Like Dovina said nice metaphor.
This shows the duality between human nature and science. Science has no compassion but human nature has its moments.
Your still improving. Which is more than most of us can say.
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