Re: Low by wilco	28-Nov-05/5:32 AM
meloncholy in a mellow way.
Re: Duff firs, Nawal by zodiac	5-Dec-05/1:37 AM
What it spears with potency it lacks in elegance.
Re: Light within darkness by Caducus	5-Dec-05/1:50 AM
nicely meloncholly sentiment, but sadly void of other aspects of poetry (rich language, structure, rhythm, rhyme, assonance...)
Re: Through the channel by amanda_dcosta	5-Dec-05/1:53 AM
Excellent Flow (not quite water tight) and the image of the pull from left to right was intensely and clearly put. I dont think I needed to hear the last two verses though, and I think it could end on "calling me back to do repair".
Re: Shoebox Thoughts by BrandonW	5-Dec-05/1:57 AM
Unusual for a haiku to put such a quaintly demented picture across, pleasurable to experience. I have to agree with zodiacs comment though, haiku's irritate me, they seem like poems that could be so much more.
Re: mask; an infidelity by FreeFormFixation	6-Dec-05/2:44 AM
Pleasantly Confusing
Re: laugh again by skaskowski	6-Dec-05/2:47 AM
Too much to think about for me to want to dive in and try to understand it (especially in the morning).
Re: almost missed work by calliope	6-Dec-05/2:50 AM
Cute, nothing more, nothing less... for that reason I dont particularly like this, but have had an enjoyable read, that I will forget quite quickly I am sad to say.
Re: Count All the Stars by TLRufener	7-Dec-05/6:47 AM
I have to agree with zodiac here. You've exhibited line after line of phrases that are used commonly to beg for sympathy or to dwell in pity, and so I think that justifies zodiacs complaint.
regarding some deleted poem...	7-Dec-05/6:53 AM
Very nice flow with clear images that leave a warm image of times that feel like they are about to be gone.
Re: Look Who's Talking by OneFingerAnswer	8-Dec-05/2:02 AM
You've chosen in my mind the worst poetic form barring haiku's to present this, the form is so highly repetitive that I cant rate this poem for the skill that it takes to write such a beast, and can only condemn it for the chosen form (which has distracted me from the work even more in this case than is usual). When will people learn that nothing good can come of this evil.
Re: Irish Holliday by Dovina	8-Dec-05/2:28 AM
Its the kind of thing that I might think was really deep and amusing after 8-9 pints of Guiness
Re: Better Off Dead by wilco	8-Dec-05/5:25 AM
Could be much better. Lackluster. Not really but its the kind of comment you leave on even the pieces of work of others that outshine this. Getting back to reality, this is an aimiable piece with good flow, the modern language could have made it seem unorigional and cliched were it not for the rich abstract imagery.
Re: The Third Fall Of Jesus by amanda_dcosta	8-Dec-05/5:33 AM
You have definately achieved something here, since the piece has mustered enough interest for me to read the whole of it, and there is a lot of it. The piece loses realism in places where it appears you are yearning to be christian and pandering to christianity with aspirational images based on christ. I am not saying that you are not a christian, but I am saying that it appears that you are trying to be a christian (perhaps unnecessarily)
Re: Hope by sliver	8-Dec-05/6:51 AM
Nice + quaint pleasurable read, good image with the symbol in the snow. It lacked a bit in language and didnt do anything with rythm or flow but otherwise quite nice.
regarding some deleted poem...	8-Dec-05/6:56 AM
would have voted it 7, but the starkly romantic line "We met in Coventry" pushes it to an 8.
Re: Thespian by BrandonW	8-Dec-05/7:09 AM
Poor, Im sure Ive read work by you that is much better than this. Im sure this represents something very emotional in your life, but the simplicity and lack of elegance makes me just not want to care. It adhears rigidly to some form or another to the cost of the piece.
Re: Chills by BrandonW	8-Dec-05/7:11 AM
Nice flow, borders on humour, good metaphors.
Re: Emma Barksdale by rahson_s	8-Dec-05/12:28 PM
Ouch.
Re: Emma Barksdale by rahson_s	8-Dec-05/12:35 PM
By the way, the site sends more chills through me the more I read. Heart provoking.