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Light within darkness

Member since 2002 · Posted 2 Dec 2005 · 5 comments

My love prayer left my lifeline through unholy steeples to a bitter bloodied orphan. God is a good listener his sign language silence the rain tells me doom his answer in brail. Jesus lays buried in me varnishing my eyes watching me cry the way he did for Magdalene. Our light of life is in darkness is in me God help you all the way God helped his own.

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[9] Dovina 2-Dec-05/10:13 AM Reply

Could be a Christmas card, a kind of sad beauty.
Jesus LIES buried.

[n/a] Niphredil 3-Dec-05/3:30 AM Reply

"braille", not "brail".

[8] zodiac 3-Dec-05/6:35 AM Reply

Better than your usual.

[9] ALChemy 3-Dec-05/8:22 AM Reply

It seems most of the times Jesus wept in the bible it was followed by a resurrection. I'm not sure if that's any consolation to you or not but...
http://www.soulfoodministry.org/docs/JesusWept.htm

[3] cyan9 5-Dec-05/1:50 AM Reply

nicely meloncholly sentiment, but sadly void of other aspects of poetry (rich language, structure, rhythm, rhyme, assonance...)